On the Rise

By RW

On the rise,
Heat intensify,
A life that goes by,
Eyes that long to cry,
A love that lurks a pain that grows inside,
A mental that don’t forget
Erase the past for a future that don’t exist,
On the rise,
Trading the truth for lies,
A ghost that’s not seen or heard,
Not one worrd
Gone in the wind,
Give you chills,
You feel the breeze,
Somebody rescue me,
On the rise,
Water that moves rocks,
An ocean with no waves,
Gray clouds with no rain
A smile that breeds pain.

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7 Comments

  1. NJ on January 24, 2024 at 7:53 PM

    RW,

    I like the use of second-person narrative where you speak to your readers to help them feel immersed in the story.

  2. Jan W. on January 24, 2024 at 8:21 PM

    KW,

    Your powerful writing is filled with emotion and strong imagery. This poem breaks my heart. You have the gift of making the reader feel. I hope you find answers. Please keep writing. Your work needs to be heard. I look forward to reading more of it.

  3. Prof. L on February 2, 2024 at 4:07 PM

    The lines about missing things from those things that are supposed to be whole was so impactful.

    “An ocean with no waves.”

    “A ghost that’s not seen or heard.”

    Beautiful. Thanks for your words.

  4. Geneve on February 16, 2024 at 2:39 PM

    RW, your poem unfolds the themes of internal conflict and emotional struggle through vivid imagery. The repetition of “On the rise” shows the feeling of urgency, as if the person is grappling with unresolved issues. Overall, this poem evokes a sense of unease, leaving the readers to contemplate the hidden depths of human experience.

  5. Emily on February 17, 2024 at 12:49 PM

    I resonated a lot with this poem as someone who also deals with a lot of inner turmoil. It captured the essence of internal conflict and the need for resolution. Thank you for your words.

  6. Tanzil Quddus on February 18, 2024 at 5:22 PM

    Overall, I believe the text paints a vivid picture of inner turmoil and the search for meaning amidst adversity.

  7. Kennedy Critz on February 23, 2024 at 12:54 PM

    This poem unlocked so many emotions for me. I wouldn’t classify myself as sensitive, but this hit deep. Love, pain, regret, intensity, longing, despair, every line of this poem hit a different nerve. Beautifully written, deep message.

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