A New Start
By AC
Let the desolation and frustration fill up my lungs
Like tears fill up your eyes, and also mine;
Like river waters, which turned into oceans, fill up the clouds;
Let them all fill up with content,
Until they satisfy the need in our hearts
‘Til they burst into inaudible screams, silent cries,
Streams that will somehow wash away all our sins
And provide us with just what we need to bring peace
Back to our lives.
Let frustration build up, transform, die off,
Then bring about new beginnings,
Bring about a new start.
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This poem reminded me of advice I always here, “allow yourself to feel your emotions.” In this poem, I heard you urging us to feel the emotion of frustration and let that fuel us to “bring about new beginnings…a new start,” and I really felt that. Though some emotions are labeled as “negative,” they are still emotions that we feel and experience, and we can use those emotions to bring about positive changes. Thank you for sharing with us.
I like the imagery, it’s very relatable and helps me understand the author’s feelings.
This poem can speak to anyone going through a rough time. In the end hope is what gets us through it.
Beautiful poem! It reminds me of meditation the way you describe allowing the build-up of frustration and negativity to die off or wash away. Keep up the fantastic work!
AC,
This poem was written beautifully. In it you discuss uncomfortable feelings yet in such a delicate and comforting way. The first three lines paint such a vivid image of what unchecked frustration might feel like, “like rivers, which turned to oceans, fill up the clouds” is just such a powerful simile showing this cycle of pent up frustration that might start off so small and the new beginnings that may come with its cycle. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece
Hello, I enjoyed reading your poem. The way you describe frustration is incredibly vivid, it reminds me of choking and drowning. I might suggest using other ways to convey similarities instead of the work “like” such as, metaphors which encourage the reader to make their own connections. Great Job.
Hi AC,
Your poem reflects so much of our experience as human beings–the difficult emotions we must feel in our bodies before they can transform into something new and hopeful. I can feel it when you write about the frustration and desolation in your lungs, eventually turning into storm clouds and rain that then wash away sins–clearing the way for inner peace. And a new chance. This is something we can all relate to as human beings.
You use such beautiful language in your poem. These lines really touched me:
“Like tears fill up your eyes, and also mine;
Like river waters, which turned into oceans, fill up the clouds;”
I was curious about the the word “content” in the fourth line. I first read it as meaning “something contained,” like letting the ocean and your lungs fill up with the content of yourself.
When I read your poem the second time, I read “content” as meaning “peaceful, happy, calm.” I was curious to know which one you intended. If the first, I was curious about these contents you hold in yourself.
Thank you so much for writing this poem, as I also wrestle with feeling tough emotions–as we all do. It felt like the sun coming up.
It defines so much intense feelings into words; an emotional experience. Well written.
This is a wonderful poem with a great topic. It is great to hear that you are putting the bad past behind you, and you are starting new. This is the first step in developing into a better person and changing your life. I love how you use a lot of imagery to convey the point of your hard past life. It really beings me as a reader. Great job, keep up the good work!
Hi AC,
This is such an inspiring poem. I love the message you portray about implementing change for a new and hopefully better beginning. I think this journey of feeling so miserable somewhere, whether it be because of the physical location, the people there, the things going on, or just what’s going on in your own head, until it essentially almost breaks you and you’re forced to move on in any aspect, is something a lot of people can relate to. The language you used is very vivid and expresses your feelings of frustration so well. New beginnings can be what is necessary sometimes, to bring peace as you said. Things can get very bad, but if you put in the effort to make change, they can get so much better. Thank you for sharing!
Ainsley
AC,
I love the imagery you create of tears washing away our sins. This is powerful! I can sense the tone shift from angry, sad, and painful to fresh and strong. I hope you find this strength and newness in your life!
This is absolutely beautiful. Sometimes when we are faced with hard times or unfortunate circumstances it can be very hard to realize that there is even the slightest possibility of making it through. The frustration or sadness tries to consume us with all of its might, but as long as we do not allow that to happen, it’ll become clear to us that there is possibility of more. There is possibility for change. There is possibility for new beginnings. And your words reminded me of that. Thank you so much for sharing.
Hi AC! This poem contains some incredibly visceral, vivid, and visually appealing descriptions that I can’t get enough of. The use of concrete, physical body parts (lungs, heart, eyes) adds an intimacy with the piece that I was not expecting, and I’m not used to seeing. It was beautiful! Your similes and metaphors scream creativity, and my favorite lines were the second and third where you gorgeously describe the transference of water in all its forms (tears, rivers, oceans, clouds). Absolutely amazing. I love that there are some slant rhymes at the end of some of the lines (mine/cries/ lives/die) and the intensity yet subtlety of your writing style is nothing short of beautiful. I could read poems like this all day and never grow tired of it. Amazing work, and please keep writing!!!
An excellent way to describe a good cry, sometimes we just need to let it out! This was amazing to read about the hard times we go through but just let it come out and get through it!
Desolation is a great word choice, so powerful and unique!
I really enjoyed this poem and writing! I hope you too can have a new beginning! I wish you the best!
~JP
This poem was so well written. You used such good words to paint a picture in readers minds!! Keep up the great work! and never stop writing!
Hey AC I hope you are doing well! Awesome poem by the way I hope you keep it up! Why I picked yours is the symbolism that I see in this poem and thought going into it. I think my favorite part is how you compared it to Noahs arc even if you didn’t say it. I hope if this poem is about you can get that fresh start soon.
Hey AC, I enjoyed this poem so much and I just wanted to thank you for sharing it! I can really feel the pain and emotion in your words and it is so powerful. I can’t speak for you, however, I imagine these are hard times for you and I just want to remind you to stay strong and that good things are coming. Don’t stop writing, thank you again for sharing.
I really like the wording used in this poem it created a sense of imagery and a strong story. This poem showed how even though we may be frustrated once we get it all out tomorrow is a new day and a new start for better things to come. Keep up the great work!!
This piece is one filled with emotion. Your choice of words is particularly good and conveys the message you want. Nicely done!
Hello AC, I want to start of by saying how much I loved your poem. The language you used here flowed together smoothly and was captivating. I can feel the strength between your sentences, and the motivation you have, and give off as you describe the refreshens of a new start. Finding peace after living in what feels like chaos, is a really hard thing to do, but it’s not impossible! I admire the way you think, and how you hold onto hope, knowing that one day where you stand the grass will be greener. I want to thank you for writing and sharing this poem, it really was touching.
I wish you the best- Aaliyah
This poem is very inspiring and filled with great imagery and diction. I like your use of descriptive scenes to help connect the reader to your true emotions. Thank you for sharing, I encourage you to keep writing!
Wonderfully evocative line: let frustration build up, transform, die off, then bring about new beginnings….
Your poem depicts the depth of your emotion so well. Before your last stanza that focuses of that uphill battle for a new start or change of any kind, focuses on your past. Crying and tears are a continues part in the past you share, however every time they are introduced depicted in a different way. The different depiction enriches your poem.
Hi AC,
I really enjoyed reading your poem. This was a short poem, yet it was full of depth. Reading this poem made me realize that starting a new is a really important thing. I have felt the need to start over so many times, but I wasn’t sure how to do. I wasn’t sure if I was able to move on from things, something is too hard to move on from. But if you learn how to it would be much easier to move through life more positively. Really great job! Please keep writing poems!
The comparison of emotions with physical actions of tears so the amount of emotion. This shows the overwhelming amount of emotion. The need to satisfy heart with emotion shows the link between emotional and physical pain. The analogy of silent screams could also show the need to let out these emotions without being able to. This is very well done in the poem. The scream also washes away sins that show when releasing these emotions it helps to deal with them. The letting out these emotions creates a new start, a very strong powerful message. Very well done analogy.
AC,
I love the raw emotion in your poem. The honesty of the pain one has to face for them to heal. A lot of people do not allow themselves to face these emotions due to the fear of being weak, but facing these emotions allows for recovery and is a sign of strength and growth. I give you a lot of respect for being able to face these emotions and to be able to talk about them. The ending of your poem was my favorite part to read. It shows the growth and recovery of a new start to life. It made me happy that you were able to turn the negative feelings around and I wish you the best in your future!
I think this is an amazing poem. It’s tells a story of how you go through the worsts time of your life but how you don’t get over your problems, but you go through them and feel the pains. I think you have to feel the pains of life events to actually move on. If you push all your feelings away and don’t deal with them then you won’t have room for new beginnings. I love how touched on starting new beginnings. Everyone deserves new beginnings. Please keep writing!
Appreciate the passion of this poem. Expresses emotion and has a positive resolution.
Thank you AC for this beautiful poem. I love the images you use – tears, river waters, filling up and then bursting and washing away our sins. Yes! And then peace and new beginnings. I found your poem so honest and also hopeful, from desolation to a new start.
“Like river waters, which turned into oceans, fill up the clouds;
Let them all fill up with content” – One example of how descriptive and creative this poem is!
Crying is a great way to get frustration and pain out so you can grow, it’s a great topic to write and read about!
“Bring about a new start” – My new favorite way to say that! Also, a great way to end the poem by talking about new beginnings!
~JP
I like your poem and use of imagery My favorite lines are where you state:
“Let frustration build up, transform, die off,
‘Til they burst into inaudible screams, silent cries,
“Then bring about new beginnings,”
I can relate to it that letting go of your frustrations and venting helps to set your mind at ease and brings forth new beginnings.
I would first like to say that this poem is beautifully written. It plays into emotion very strongly!!!
You have created very good imagery that allows the reader to feel the emotion you are feeling. I felt moved by the intense emotion at the beginning that calms down at the idea of a new beginning. This piece has great language and is overall a fantastic poem. Keep writing and using poetry as a form to express yourself!
AC,
Your poem is truly captivating. You have such a great way of capturing your emotions and being vulnerable, which is what poetry is really about. I love how throughout the poem it conveys emotions of being sad and angry, but at the end you change directions and leave with a more positive tone of letting go. Keep it up!
Hi AC, this writing is powerful. The comparison of emotions to air in your lungs, waters, and clouds creates a great visual out of something invisible. I like how the poem shifts from dark to light when at the end you highlight a new beginning/start after the hard times. You are so strong, thank you for being vulnerable.
I want to say that this is a beautiful poem. It shows the cycle of emotions. It shows that everyone’s emotions are extremely valid and you’re allowed to feel them. It shows that the cycle of strong emotions is to let the feelings come in, build up, transform, and die off. I think if you sit on your feeling they can change with more thinking. I also think that it’s good to just scream and yell your feelings out sometimes, it can be such a nice release and then they are out in the open and out of your mind so you don’t have to over think them. Thank you for sharing!!!
This poem truly spoke to me. I feel like in a way, it depicts how a lot of people feel nowadays. It is comforting to see, and it makes people feel less alone. Although this is touching, it still shines a light on hope as well. Keep up the good work.
I hope you continue expressing your feelings and emotions, especially frustration, through writing poetry.
Your poem leaves me with the hope that you will find solace from pain and peace of mind through this endeavor.
Your poem, “A New Start,” is quite expressive and moving. You are brave to bare your emotions and feelings about the future and to share your hopes for finding peace out of pain. I hope you continue to use the medium of poetry to find solace and understand how one person’s words can bring meaning to so many.
Impressive use of simile in the first few lines. I enjoyed the use of water imagery throughout this poem, as if the water’s cleansing power (the emotional resilience of the author) brings strength to continue on.
Beautiful prose and great use of smilie, the imagery is so easy to visualize and I can wildly relate to requiring a cry to reset, great poem
A unique and thought-out poem. To start a new beginning, one must learn from their past and grow from it rather than let that past weigh their future down. Allowing yourself to go through the pain of coming to terms with your past is the best way to start a brand-new future.
This is an incredible poem with a lot of descriptive language and similes to convey your point. It is a very professional poem which is impressive. My favorite part is “Let frustration build up, transform, die off, then bring about new beginnings, bring about a new start.” It is very good that you are aware of the bad life that you had and want to start a new one. Keep up the great writing, the future is bright!
Such powerful imagery in this poem, AC. It really captures how strong negative emotions could be held and dissipate in a way that makes us feel rejuvenated. I find this poem inspiring. It provides a great way to think about our feelings. Thank you
Pain and suffering are temporary if we let them be, and once enough time has passed, will happiness and joy return to us. This poem is a great way to realize that there is a process for everything and that when we experience the lowest of lows, we will also experience the highest of highs. Trust in the process, as this poem has so amazingly done.
This poem was so well written. I like the part in which the water imagery was brought up! Keep up the great work!
This poem has imagery that can easily be pictured. It also had a deep lasting effect on me. Great poem!
This poem gives intense imagery and shows how emotions can play a large role in this piece. Very well written!
Great poem! I can tell it was thought out in depth because the descriptive imagery was very detailed!
I love the imagery that you used in your poem, some of the things that you described it made me be able to really tell what you were trying to describe. Keep up the great work!
I’ve never read something that so accurately describes how I feel when I’m frustrated or angry. It’s so easy to say “the past is in the past” but until you allow yourself to feel all your emotions they will just continue to build until you burst. Such a unique piece I really enjoyed reading.
I love how you compare a cloud, which is a naturally occurring thing that drops water, to a human whose eyes have a similar purpose.
The poem starts off showing extreme emotions and ideas of pain and struggle. The rest of the poem is more positive inspiring people to be able to get through struggle. Leaving the poem with “bring about a new start” leaves a positive outlook. This is very well done.
Love the poem! It expresses the emotions and feeling that you felt and I hope you create this opportunity to be a new you!
This is a fantastic poetry on an excellent subject. It’s wonderful to hear that you’re beginning fresh and leaving the bad past behind. This is the first step to transforming your life and becoming a better person. I really like how you illustrate your point about your difficult past life with a lot of pictures. As a reader, it definitely grabs my attention. Keep up the wonderful effort, you did great!
Love love love this message and also love the the person that wrote it keep your head up bro for this brought tears of joy to my heart ❤️❤️❤️
This is a very well written poem. It has a lot of amazing imagery with the different ways you described the water washing away the old person, making way for a new start. The way you described tears turning into the water washing away the sin and old person tells me that this change or starting over may be challenging or difficult for this person. I think that this is extremely relatable because change is often difficult, even if we know that that change is for the better. This is a lovely poem. Please continue writing! I wish you all the best!
Very unique thorough poem, I really like the comparisons you make especially with the cloud, the change you describe is very well said, the only change I would make is the capital “B” in bring to a lower case “b” just because its after a comma not a period.
This poem has very powerful themes. Feeling your emotions and not hiding them from yourself and others is so important. Every emotion we have is for a reason, and we need to let ourselves feel them! Through this, we can allow ourselves to let go of the things that are burdening us and move on. New beginnings are all around us and occur many times in our lives. I really like that this poem has taken these two themes and connected them and portrayed to the reader that new beginnings are always awaiting us, as long as we allow ourselves to get there!
The imagery that you used in this poem is truly amazing and gives such a great visual to your audience. Change can be such a difficult aspect of life, and although I’m sure not all of us can relate to your situation, change is something that I think we all can relate to! Keep with your writing, it touches people you don’t even realize.
This poem is beautiful and really hits deeply. The word choice is powerful and descriptive, and the imagery is real and can be seen clearly. These is always light at the end of the tunnel, and I love your ability to take all that pain, hate, and sadness, and let it die off. Instead of letting it bind you, you allowed yourself to overcome and look towards the future. Truly inspirational.
Keep your head up my friend. Wishing you all the best :).
Hi AC,
This poem was extremely well written. I feel like everyone can connect to the powerful thoughts and words you wrote about. Sometimes, we need to go through some tough times to realize a new start is needed. Change is hard, but it may be necessary. I also liked how you used words to illustrate what you were imagining. The imagery in this poem was very helpful to convey your powerful message. Thank you for sharing your important ideas.
This poem does a really good job of expressing anguish and pain and many other emotions that one would dread going through. Very meaningful.
I truly appreciate the message your poem delivers on feeling our emotions. It shows us to embrace what we are feeling instead of fighting it. It is extremely relatable by the way you describe the emotions by comparing them to the ocean and the inaudible screams. The intense rush of how it feels to be mad or upset was captured so well and by ending the poem they way it did, shows that it is temporary pain and validates emotions instead belittling it.
This is a powerful poem. The way your words flow and your word choice are the glue to this. It really allows the reader to visualize exactly what you are talking about. Thank you for writing this. I would love to read more of your writing.
AC,
Accepting your emotions and recognising how important they are in order to move froward is so important, and you portrayed it very well. Being able to start fresh means moving on from the past, and learning from it can also be a huge opportunity. Looking forward towards that new start can be a helpful motivator when struggling with the emotions that you need to overcome in order to get there. Your imagery did a good job of describing what it can feel like to be faced with these emotions. New beginnings can be an amazing part of life, and I encourage you to hold this value of accepting your emotions close to you, and I wish you the best and a great journey.
Hi! I enjoyed reading your poem! I felt like I really resonated with your poem because of all the imagery and descriptions. I can tell that a lot of thought was put into the writing. Good Job!
Hi there!
This poem moved me because it really showed how the intensity of heavy feelings like frustration, anger, and sadness can build up. I think that it was a good reminder that you can’t ignore those feelings, because eventually, when someone feels like that and tries to avoid dealing with it, they are bound to explode. However, either way, if you face those feelings head on or if you try to compartmentalize them, you will end up feeling them fully at some point, which is needed in order to move on. I think it’s one of the best feelings to be able to move on and feel that relief. Sometimes that breakthrough is exactly what you need in order for things to start falling into place. It’s never too late to begin again! Best of luck!
I love this poem. You do a great job expressing the bittersweet feelings about a new start. Having to leave behind something is like mourning a loss but knowing it’s for a bigger purpose brings the sweet feeling of knowing there’s something great for you on the other side. With new starts come new people, experiences and a whole new world. I loved that you wrote about this and conveyed emotions of both the bitter and sweet side because that is reality and changes are not always easy at first. I found this poem beautiful and crafted with a very creative mind. Your word choice and descriptive details showed intense emotion and helped me paint a picture in my head. I also loved this poem because the topic resonated with me, as I have recently had a new start in my life with something personal. Thank you for this poem, I loved it and I know anyone reading it will too.
The last 3 lines are so beautiful and impactful, it is so important to acknowledge how you feel and understand that is how you feel right now. But then do not let it negatively impact you but rather let it evaporate and bring on new change and new life. Please continue to use poetry and writing as an outlet, you are a beautiful writer. Wishing you all the best and for the new beginnings to lead you where you want them to.
The writer is talking about feeling sad and frustrated, like they are drowning in their emotions. They want to let it all out and cry until they feel better. They hope that by doing this, they can wash away their mistakes and find peace. They believe that by letting their frustration build up and then releasing it, they can start anew and find a fresh start.
You are eager looking forward to a new beginning but your frustration is building up in your lungs. It’s so powerful and uncontrollable that your eyes are watering. I like how you connect like river waters, which turned into oceans, fill up the clouds. The rivers went into the ocean and emptied their water while letting the precipitation fill up the clouds in the water cycle of life. Be patient and let them fill up with stuff in them until they satisfy the need in our hearts which is love. Till they just let out silence in need while the water streams will wash away all our sins. Just drinking water can bring us peace because it gives us nourishment.
I love the way this poem portrayed the author’s feelings. To feelings of pain and then progressing to peace and hope, this poem describes certain events in which this would take place, like a grudge or an event that would later become less and less in the future. Thank you for sharing your beautiful poem.
It reminds me of meditation the way you describe allowing the build up of anger and negativity to die off or wash away. I enjoyed reading your poem. The poem does a really good job of expressing anguish and pain and many other emotions that one would dread going through. Great job!
Beautiful emotions and words! The metaphors and similes you described are so impactful and insightful. They really help to reader feel the impact of those feelings and it really feels like a conversation with someone, helping you to release those negative feelings. I love how deep this poem gets! Great work, keep writing!
This poem gives me a large sense of relief. It makes me feel like oh someone understands how it feels and that these emotions are valid. Thank you for the poem I hope one day I can hear more but for now I ask that you remember these three things
1 you don’t have to be a hero to make an impact
2 it doesn’t make you narcissist to love yourself
3 you don’t have to be anyone that you can’t be
I hope your day/ night is going well and good bye 🙂
The first line of this poem made me think it was a song. Really strong start to a piece that’s on the shorter, simpler side. This poem does a great job capturing what a new, fresh start really is like in words. Sometimes, it’s hard to explain, but this made it seem easy.
I feel like a lot of the time in today’s society, we’re told to bottle up the emotions and not deal with them , but with some beautiful imagery you’ve shown how important it is to feel the emotion, no matter how negative it is, and then let it go to focus on what we need to do.
I like how this poem expresses how it’s ok to show your feelings. Especially going through a difficult portion of your life. Expressing your emotions is how you get through your demons. Once you get through those demons you will find the light and gain inner peace. Even though life can be hard and pointless at times there are some instances where you gain a lot more than you lose.
I love how you described the process of embracing change and starting over in this poem. Acknowledging the desolation and frustration that you feel and embracing these emotions takes courage and your writing is able to describe these struggles so well. Thank you for sharing and I hope you’re able to approach this new start with hope.
Your poem beautifully captures the emotions of desolation, frustration, and longing for peace. The use of vivid imagery, such as tears filling up eyes, rivers turning into oceans, and bursts of inaudible screams, conveys a sense of overwhelming emotions. The theme of transformation and new beginnings adds a sense of hope and resilience. I hope you get the new start you are looking for and I hope it fills your heart with purpose and happiness.
I really enjoy your poem! I think the imagery you used gives off the feeling of what you used to write it! I think this can resonate with lots of people!
AC- Beautiful imagery! Your metaphors and similes really help the reader relate to your poem and connect to it.
This is an excellent poem, and one I believe many people will be able to relate to. The metaphors used to characterize the tears helped display the emotions felt during depressive episodes, and how light can come from such darkness. This is a beautiful way of describing difficult emotions.
I like the idea of using water to highlight the cleansing of the past and the time for new beginnings; overall, it was a beautiful extended metaphor. Thank you for writing this!
AC,
I love the metaphors used throughout the poem. They connect people, and our feelings, to nature around us. This poem creates connections to nature that might have not been thought of before. I can feel your raw emotions and thank you for sharing this beautiful poem. You have a bigger impact than you know.
I love this poem! it’s so beautifully written!!
This poem is so beautiful. There is so much emotion in this poem.
This poem is great, many people will be able to relate to this given you’re talking about creating a new start for yourself. I love how you use the ocean and water in your poem to express the sense of moving on from your mistakes and creating new starts and a new story for yourself.
The choice of imagery here is very well done. This poem brings out such strong emotions and feelings, I feel like many people including myself will be able to relate to these difficult moments. Truly great work here.
I love this poem and how every word just fights right into place and they flow and the poem reads so well together that there isn’t a hard time reading or trying to understand how to read it either. I love how you use your tires to also express that they are what your heart needs and tell others to keep them until they satify the need you have in your heart. Very inspiring great work.
Despite the somber imagery of inaudible screams, desolation, and frustration in the poem, I find that the poem is overall still a hopeful one. It is motivational in the sense that it portrays the fact that everything is a cycle and times keep changing. While you may be in a bad situation at a specific point in time, this will all die off and become a new start eventually. Pacience is key in this case and your poem motivates people to persevere and wait for that new start.
Dear AC,
I recently read your poem “A New Start” Your words really invigorated my heart. I want to begin by expressing how moving I found your work of poetic art. The deeper reality contained within the lines really inspired my mind. This caused me to ponder the deeper meaning behind what each line was communicating. The rawness of emotion on display captivated my attention right away, each phrase increased in meaning as I continued to scroll. I felt this poem transpiring something higher displaying themes of forgiveness, redemption, and ultimately peace that were unveiled in the end. A paradox is on display from lines one to eighteen as desolation turns to peace setting an individual free. Yet, the only way to reach that peace and a new beginning was by recognizing the pain expressed in line one. I thought this was a particularly powerful part of the poem as you spoke to the human reality of acknowledging pain. Only after that pain was acknowledged could the individual wrestle with the emotions being released to begin the healing process of seeking forgiveness and freedom from those past deeds. This is truly poetic art presenting good themes that caused my mind to elevate and communicate a sense of wonder, hope, and a new start.
Sincerely, B.
Dear AC,
I have got the chance to write about one poem in the Free Minds Book Club and your poem felt like I really needed to hear this in my point of life. The reason as to why I felt a connection with your poem “A New Start” is because of the way you convey and express your feelings as if It’s like you’ve put into words what so many of us feel but don’t know how to say. The way you described the feelings of being so stressed and overwhelmed that you felt the need to burst really made me feel like I’m not alone. As a college student each and every day is a mix of emotions when struggling with classes and social life and I feel like my balloon is just about to pop. But then the part where you say “streams can wash away our sins and provide us with just what we need to bring peace back into our lives” really got to me. Because It’s like you’re offering hope that no matter how bad things get, there’s always a chance for a fresh start and a clean slate. That’s something I needed to hear, especially when I am in school and I don’t do as well as I wanted in an exam or don’t meet the right friends that I wanted, there’s always a chance to start again which is really refreshing. So thank you for letting us know we are not alone and for the reminder that with every dark tunnel there is always a light at the end of it.
Sincerely, M.S
Sometimes a heartbreak is needed to remind you to pick yourself up and start again!
I love love love this! I wrote my own poem about black woman before and this is what it reminded me of. I love the use of metaphors and the emotion you showed throughout this. It has definitely touched me and others
AC this poem is fantastic. How you describe this building up of pent up emotion and then once it peaks it explodes and cleanses is not only powerful imagery but takes us on the rollercoaster ride of emotion that we all often relate to. You capture this metaphor in such a good way drawing in nature. Thank you for writing and I hope you keep it up!