A Gift If You Choose to Accept

By MR

If I could give you anything, I’d surely extend to you the immeasurable gift of hope…
Because when life and all those you trusted turn their
backs this element should help you progressively cope…
Through the hardships that are current, and the struggles that are sure to come…
So be motivated regardless of your shortcomings because
the battles lost turn into lessons of the wars you won…
Yet, I’ve still discovered that when I’m positively grounded,
I’m less likely to entertain any form of hate…
Due to the fact, my receptors are programmed only to pull
towards energy that’s constructing my self-desire of fate…
And although it’s never within me to judge, I will criticize
for the sake of my eternal peace and clarity…
A past stricken with adolescent anxiety and the absence
of love helped bridge the spills off my pride without charity.
This quest became a marriage without commitment…
A formal pursuit to the unknown without persistence…
An undying legacy without acknowledging tradition…
And my choice to accept divinity and truth without religion.
Unfortunately, I know the last line may raise the question
of whether am I a God-fearing man or not…
But to comprehend my analogy, you must first separate
the lessons from the questions encouraging your plot…
Because the difference between religion and the culture
of truth is that there’s actually no difference at all…
Nevertheless, how you worship God and cast your own
Karma will ultimately determine whether you rise or fall…
And when the eyes of your spirit finally open, you’ll
Realize the commonality between us is that we’re all living
and that our imperfections are small reminders that nothing
in life isn’t achievable without the right decision.

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10 Comments

  1. Aditi Furtado on November 27, 2021 at 3:13 PM

    Hi MR! My name is Aditi, and I am a freshman at Wayne State University in Detroit. I’m currently enrolled in a class that is attributed to Service Learning which aims branch out to communities that is beyond the university and other corporations.
    I’ll admit that I was initially drawn to your poem by the tags, especially the one that listed this poem out to be hopeful through struggles. Your poem was so raw and intense and captivated me in the first few lines. I understand that the line that you wrote, ‘A past stricken with adolescent anxiety and the absence of love helped bridge the pills of my pride without charity’ is a direct testimony to how strong you have become through the inconsistencies you have faced earlier on in your life. That line solidified the sense of darkness but the grasp of hope the theme of the poem seems to be showing through.
    You are an incredibly gifted individual, and it is very apparent through h your work. I personally never turned to writing as a way to air out my feelings but I’m so sure through your piece that it must be a great way to open up in a safe environment.

  2. Ruth Bryant on November 28, 2021 at 10:09 AM

    Hi,

    I really enjoyed your poem. I encourage you to keep writing and share your inspiring work of positivity. The ending sections of the work (about religion) I found particularly interesting. If you wanted to, you could build upon that topic onto its own poem.

    I am a little confused on the pattern of the ellipsis. The rhyming pattern is also a little off. I see some of the pattern, bit it feels imperfect in other areas.

    Thank you for sharing your work with me!

  3. tnicholson13 on November 30, 2021 at 7:40 PM

    MR, this poem is awesome. It really encapsulates the idea of Hope and how Hope can get us through the toughest of times. I admire the way you speak from the heart and give your true experiences. I also enjoy the rhymes within your poem.

  4. Franny on December 3, 2021 at 10:55 PM

    I really enjoyed the later parts of the poem about religion and its analogy. It felt really well written, and it definitely spoke to me the most out of all of the poem. I think your writing is very beautiful, the words really do feel like art. Sometimes it was a little bit hard to figure out the meaning, but on the other hand that also left it more up to interpretation, which can be really good with art.
    Going back and re-reading the beginning of the poem after reading the whole thing also just gave it all another dimension!

  5. Francisco Salinas on December 8, 2021 at 2:08 AM

    Hi MR. I am a student from a community driven class. While I was reading your poem, the tone made me think of someone really, really intelligent, wise, perhaps someone with knowledge to bear. I think it is best to tell you what I think the poem means, since others will not do so. I believe the line that mentions separating the lessons from the questions is taking the lessons from the wars you won, or the actions you deemed correct, to answer the questions you have about life. I believe “A formal pursuit to the unknown without persistence” refers to your pursuit or your criticism of those that are not hopeful. And I think those without persistence are also people with a religion. Religion being something that will never die, and I believe “without acknowledging tradition” may refer to the fact that people with religion do not recall the activities or rituals as repeated for centuries. I then think that is why you chose not to accept religion, because you do not believe in it. I believe what you did was you separated lessons from questions yourself: the lessons being what you learned from the past by following hope to answer the question of whether there is a god or not. I believe that was the question for you, but generally, the questions of your life may refer to the questions you have about life. I believe that, along with your anxious adolescence and the people you trusted that have turned their backs on you, IS your story that you are trying to tell. I believe you wrap everything up by first separating religion with culture of truth (which I assume implies religion is not true), and then bringing them back together since it is ultimately hope that dictates how successful a person will be, regardless of the belief in a god or not. In summary, hope guides a person into persisting, making actions based on successful lessons to ultimately make the right decision for them.
    I don’t think I have to tell you how good your poem is. Other people will do that. What I will say is that I only needed 100 words for credit, and I spent an hour thirty minutes and 453 words on yours. Additionally, I type as fast as I think, so most of the time I was having fun analyzing your poem. If I am completely wrong about your story, let that be on me. A great poem is simply a great poem. I genuinely wish I could ask you for what it means because I spent so much time on it. Regardless, I hope this analysis helps you in some way. Adieu, great sage.

  6. Billie Marcheva on December 15, 2021 at 10:03 PM

    Hi MR,
    Thank you for this gift. Thank you for sharing this poem. I was very moved by your words and I want to applaud your resilience and wisdom, expressed so eloquently and with such soul. I love that you are in tune with “the commonality between us,” the shared experience of existence that ties us together.
    I wish you good luck and high spirits on your journey. Keep writing.

  7. Elvis Lang on January 13, 2022 at 3:26 PM

    I would encourage you to lean on your faith and hold strong. I couldn’t agree with you more. Nobody is perfect. Nobody can always do the right thing, but we can always try.

  8. Hamed Elfeky on January 13, 2022 at 4:21 PM

    Dear MR,
    Reading your poem really helped us rethink about how religion, faith, and hope are actually connected. I’ve noticed from examples in my life, how people use this “immeasurable gift of hope” to cope when everything in their life seems to go against them. However, this gift of hope, for some, is bound to religion but for others, as yours, is not bound. Reading your poem helped me think about religion as a possible means to gain this hope and salvation, but can just as easily be achieved without. I appreciate your insights on hope and found it inspiring how you portray the minimal differences between religions and the “culture of truth”. This poem invited us to think and look at faith in a different way, which we greatly appreciate. We would love to read more of your works in the future!

  9. KC on April 7, 2022 at 4:21 PM

    MR,

    Thank you for sharing your experience! You have been formed by many difficult experiences. I enjoy your hope and positivity. Keep that mindset!

  10. PA on May 11, 2022 at 7:09 PM

    I like what you said about our shortcomings can turn into lessons. To me, your poem is telling me to keep positive, acknowledge I am not perfect, and try to learn from my failures and be better next time. I also really like how rhythmic your words become at the end. We all struggle, but your words give me hope.

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