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By WD
If the body that you rent
Is not just a cup but the content
Then your identity is entity
The time you spend with me is never wasted
I speak truth and help you face it
To take you far beyond the basics
One with patience
Looks at this bankrupt nation and misapplied enumeration
As the reason why there is a matrix
I’m here awake with
So many sleeping minds, I have to keep in mind
Not to calculate the steps I take
Because the steps I take are eager
To fulfill a greater will
Everyone is great until
They find a blind time with no help left
Why don’t you help self
Unless you have something better to do
But what is better than you
WD encourages the reader to suggest a title.
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Title suggestion: Awaken
1-This is excellent writing. They call this metaphysical poetry, and it takes seasoning.
2-Could you clarify:
Because the steps I take are eager/To fulfill a greater will
What is the nature of that will? Is it a free will? The will of God?
3-There are a number of title ideas you can cull from these lines, or of course:
“Wide Awake in the Matrix”
“Do You Have Something Better to Do?”
4- Or, you could go further, consider these ideas as starting points, get a different idea. I feel like saying, “I hope you think of something even better!”
Write On!
Dear WD, The title I suggest is “Identity as Entity.” I like the word play of identity and entity, even though I’m not totally sure what you mean by it. I like the image of the body as something you rent — we have this body to use as long as we are alive, and for some people it is like a cup with focus on the outside way it looks. But for others the focus is on what the cup holds — learning, thinking, feeling, caring so they develop wisdom that they can share with others. That’s my guess about what it means. I can tell that your mind is not a “sleeping mind.” I hope you keep on writing. You have a lot to say. Best wishes to you,
Janet
The matrix metaphor is amazing! Maybe you should title it “Awake in the Matrix” … or something about “Awake Amongst the Sleeping” …