Story of My Life

By CM

My life is like a notebook filled with empty pages
Bitter words and blank statements
I stare at the pages and try to picture
What should go in these spaces
When I can’t get my own, I take from others
And try to replace them
I’m not being a follower
I just use the leader’s example as inspiration, persuasion
And sometimes motivation
Convincing me to keep the ink on my paper
These bitter words are like lemons and grapefruits
If you put enough sugar on it, it will taste true
People sell it everyday like Minute Maid
But a lie will stay sour until it’s lemonade
These statements I make that seem so bold
Are often the ones that make my heart
Look so cold

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21 Comments

  1. Hilary on March 23, 2022 at 10:33 PM

    “These bitter words are like lemons and grapefruits
    If you put enough sugar on it, it will taste true
    People sell it everyday like Minute Maid
    But a lie will stay sour until it’s lemonade
    These statements I make that seem so bold
    Are often the ones that make my heart
    Look so cold”

    These were my favorite lines from your poem. The play on bitter taste and truth/lies was really effective and the rhyming was very creative and drove home your point. I also enjoyed the last lines, that of your statements, your boldness making you look cold. I liked the word choice here. ‘Look’ instead of ‘feel’, indicating that it’s not the actual case but how you are perceived.

    I really enjoyed this poem.

  2. andrewrfretwell on March 30, 2022 at 8:45 PM

    CM – great descriptions here with the sense of taste – sourness, bitter, sweetness, artificial sweetness (Minute Maid). I’m curious as to your choice to start in the metaphor of a book and then move to fruits. It almost feels like there are two different poems here saying the same thing.

  3. Brittani Forman on April 5, 2022 at 2:19 PM

    Hi CM
    This is very deep and poetic. The metaphors and descriptions really touched me. I hope all is well and I hope you continue to write.

  4. KC on April 7, 2022 at 12:59 PM

    Thank you for sharing this! The metaphors you use help convey your point. I can picture the book you describe and taste the fruit. Keep writing and staying true to yourself!

  5. Zach on April 13, 2022 at 6:48 PM

    Wow! I really loved this poem, the imagery and the use of so many senses like sight with the pages and then taste with the fruits and the word sour! My favorite line was “If you put enough sugar on it, it will taste true”. This line was so impactful and such a unique and cool way of expressing how lies can be hidden by what we think is true! Amazing! Thank you so much for sharing, this was amazing!

  6. Colby on April 15, 2022 at 3:05 PM

    Great work! I really fell in deep into your writing and the Story of Your Life. I loved the continuity of the lemonade/fruit metaphors and it really made me think. I could really see how much of an impact writing has had on you, with the struggles and the passion you feel towards it. Fantastic work!

  7. Emma Moody on April 19, 2022 at 10:11 AM

    Wow, this poem is amazing! It seems you can feel what the writer is feeling in this poem, there is confession, a bit of remorse, then justification and explanation. You can tell that the writer of this poem is really trying to “keep the ink on the paper,” and that this is probably an outlet for them to express their feelings into beautiful and clever poetry. Great job, keep it up!

  8. Jacey on April 19, 2022 at 7:52 PM

    Hi CM,

    Thank you for sharing your beautiful work. I appreciate these words and you for allowing others to read personal words. It is hard to look at your own life and reflect on the blank pages you with were full of love and happiness. I think it is an amazing comparison, that words even covered in sugar can come from a bitter place. I feel as we age we see the true bitterness of others and what their words are laced with. It is a sad realization, but one that I think is necessary. It helps you see people’s hearts and true intentions and teaches you lessons that you can take and use to fill in your blank pages with love, grace, and compassion. Thank you again for your work, it is so appreciated.

    Much love,

    Jacey

  9. Belle on April 19, 2022 at 9:00 PM

    Hi CM,
    Thank you for sharing your poem. I enjoyed reading it. I like how you compared your life to a notebook. I think that is a great idea and you mentioning empty pages makes me think of the empty pages of my life, especially those in the future. This may not be a scary thought for everyone, but it is for me. I believe guidance and inspiration is important in filling the blank pages of our lives. You make a lot of great points and great comparisons in your poem, and it has made me think of what my life as a notebook would look like and how the true the words of the pages would be. We all seem to put sugar on our lives to make them “better”, but the truth is what is important. Thank you for sharing your thought-provoking poem. I hope you continue to write more poems and use your incredible talent.

  10. Emily L. on April 20, 2022 at 7:08 PM

    I think you made a lot of good parallels to your life being like a notebook. “I stare at the pages and try to picture what should go in these spaces” is really strong. It really draws on the idea of being uncomfortable with not knowing the future (which is pretty accurate because everyone feels this way at some point). I thought it was very clever to describe the words of others, whether true or untrue, as Minute Maid/sour lemonade. Your last three lines make the emotion of the poem more raw and more real. I really liked this poem!

  11. Taylor M. on April 20, 2022 at 10:04 PM

    Hi CM. Thank you for sharing your poem! Your words were beautiful and very thought-provoking. I had a lot of mental imagery as I was reading, which made the poem that much better. I felt like I related a lot to your poem, as I’m sure many people could. I really hope to see more of your work in the future and that you stay motivated to write! Thank you, again, CM.

  12. E and R on April 21, 2022 at 1:06 PM

    Your poem has a lot of meaning to it. Keep up the good work and never give up. We enjoyed reading your poem.

  13. Ryanne Smith on April 24, 2022 at 11:42 AM

    This poem definitely speaks volume. It is so blunt and paints a picture to the reader. I love you analogy of the lemonade and lies tasting sour. I think a lot of people now and days cover their lies up with “sugar” so people believe them even though they are truly just “sour.” Great job!

  14. Madison on April 24, 2022 at 9:27 PM

    I really like how truthful this is. I think you did a great job of keeping a uniform structure throughout the poem. The analogy of the bitter fruits was well received and did a good job of conveying your point. Keep writing, this is a great piece!

  15. Alex on April 25, 2022 at 6:52 PM

    “These bitter words are like lemons and grapefruits. If you put enough sugar on it, it will taste true. People sell it everyday like Minute Maid. But a lie will stay sour until it’s lemonade. These statements I make that seem so bold are often the ones that make my heart look so cold” Wow this is really well written! This is by far my favorite part of this poem. I think you have some real talent. you painted a picture for me about how you feel, what you see, and what you hear so well an in a very catchy way. I see the kind of person that you are as one who wants to get to the heart of the matter, one who doesn’t beat around the bush one that is to the point. That is an admirable trait to have that many people lack. How you choose to go on from now is what really matters in life. I wish you all the best and don’t stop writing!

  16. Philip on April 25, 2022 at 9:09 PM

    This is a very moving poem about identity. I like how the author describes their identity as “empty pages,” and then describing how they try to fill these pages with thoughts, words, and actions of other people. This is the central conflict of identity; who are you? What are you about? What do you stand for? And then the author recognizes the bitterness and sourness that comes from not understanding your identity, or not trying to be who you really are.

  17. Brittani on April 28, 2022 at 2:22 PM

    Dear CM
    Such a powerful piece of work. Nice flow and beautiful structure. I truly enjoyed reading this and related to it very much. Please keep working at it. It is very strong and powerful. I love the work. I truly hope you keep going.

  18. Sachiko on May 4, 2022 at 2:15 PM

    The first line “ My life is like a notebook filled with empty pages”. That is how I feel everyday. I am not always lonely and I have friends, but I always feel like I’m doing something wrong. I worry too much about what is going to happen during the day sometimes I forget to live in it. I love my life and the people around me, but I still feel like I need to do something. To accommodate my life to wan at feels better in my mind. But that’s not always right. In my mind I would think that my life would be full of excitement and drama. I am one of the only black kids in my grade in a white privileged school and I have a funny name. So my plate would seem to be full. But seeming things of a person is just an exaggerated opinion from the human (WHITE MALE) society. But besides that I love your writing. I also write, so I clicked just reading it. Keep writing about your feelings. Cause I know I am.

  19. Claire on May 9, 2022 at 8:55 AM

    It’s so hard to open up about your past and the way you talk about trying to become a better person is really inspiring. Life is like a notebook because anything can happen but it depends on what you decide to do. It’s hard to be a good person but no matter what’s going on, you can get through it. Turning yourself around is really amazing and I hope you have an amazing life!

  20. PA on May 11, 2022 at 7:33 PM

    I dig the rhythm of this poem. Your metaphors are also really good here. Everything about this piece is on point, actually. I appreciate how unafraid you are to share a part of yourself in this poem. Keep it up, my friend.

  21. Liz on May 14, 2022 at 11:56 PM

    Life is very much seemingly ready for experiences. I like the imagery you added with life being like a notebook. Often times I find that there are events and memories that we have that add onto that blank canvas and make something of it. This is a very enchanting piece of writing and the line of not being a follower but taking inspiration from other’s can be relatable and very true. Overall, this poem does a great job in highlighting what life is. I’m excited to read more!

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