Never Again
By DJ
You crossed a desert and an ocean to find me
In a rainforest sitting under a tree
To me the only friend in the world was the sky and the leaves
Then you step in my path
Oh dear, a Queen in the form of water to refresh my soul
Laugh until the sun came up and then she turned cold
One touch shattered her
And a lavender breeze took her away from me
The sky and the leaves couldn’t believe the king of alone
Was tricked by the breeze
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Dear DJ,
This was a beautiful poem to read. The imagery is so radiant and vivid, and also shocking. You capture so much emotion in a relatively short poem, which is impressive. The second half really surprises the reader, and the happy poem suddenly becomes melancholy. I really like the descriptive phrases you use, and though I do not know exactly what your intended meaning of your poem is, I think it can be a powerful metaphor for many experiences. Amazing work!
Sincerely,
Joyce
Dear DJ,
WOW! What a transcending love poem, it allowed me to feel with such deep emotion and recall the past loves of my life that were gone with the breeze as well. You truly have a gift for words, this poem although sad is also peaceful. A memory to the loves that come and go. Please continue to write and spread this beauty in the world.
I really enjoyed your use of nature to convey your feelings towards a person. This poem was very soothing. Thank you for sharing.
DJ, your words are incredible powerful. I felt while reading this poem that I was sitting in the rainforest and literally experiencing this poem through the imagery you so eloquently provided. The metaphors you use throughout the poem highlight the contrast between how much energy and life she brought and how quickly she made you feel fooled/ deceived. Please please keep writing!
This poem was amazing. You used imagery very well. I felt like I was seeing and smelling what you were saying! keep up the good work!! Never stop writing because you are very good at it!!
I liked your poem. It really made me imagine everything. Where did the inspiration come from?
DJ,
I loved reading this poem! Your nature imagery is amazing and really painted a picture in my mind. I especially enjoyed the lines, “a Queen in the form of water to refresh my soul” and “the king of alone/Was tricked by the breeze”
Keep writing!
~Maya
DJ, you use such creative language in this poem, which makes it really pleasant to read. I especially like the ending, “The sky and the leaves couldn’t believe the king of alone / was tricked by the breeze.” Although the story is sad in a way, it is so beautifully worded that I can’t help but enjoy it. Thank you for sharing!
DJ, this was beautiful! The imagery was fascinating, and you did a great job of bringing the scene you wrote to life. My favorite line was when you said: “the sky and the leaves couldn’t believe the king of alone, was tricked by the breeze”. So, so powerful. This is such an amazing poem, thank you for sharing!!
I think that was really good, the twist at the end was pretty sad
Hi DJ!
Wow, this is such a powerful poem. “A Queen in the form of water to refresh my soul” is an amazing line, all to have her taken away. Please keep writing and showing yourself to us.
DJ,
This is a really powerful and relatable story. It can be tough after love or a relationship ends, I’ve been there. There are many times in my life where I felt I was a “king of alone” (a line I love by the way). Life is weird like that, sometimes the stars have to align for something that just falls apart seemingly by nothing stronger than a breeze. Anyway, I really enjoyed the poem and I hope this letter makes you feel less alone. Reading this certainly made me feel less alone.
Sincerely,
– Ean
Dear DJ, I love this poem. It is beautiful. A queen is very lucky to have this poem written for her. I love the references to nature.
Dear DJ,
Thank you for sharing this poem. The images in it were so vibrant and filled with color, sensation, and nature. It gave me the feeling of being on the journey with this character in the poem– sitting in the leaves, feeling wonder at the landscape, and being captivated by an illusion. I like the way that the breeze that takes her away is “lavender”–pleasant– even though it’s part of this experience of heartbreak. I also loved your last two lines– the rhyme between “leaves” and “breeze,” and the humor and irony of the “king of alone” being tricked.
Thanks for writing such a vibrant, colorful, and clever poem. I hope to read more of your work.
Best,
JM
This is such an incredibly beautiful poem. I truly loved the imagery that you used because it gives such a depth to the poem. I especially loved the last three lines as it describes not only nature, but human nature as well. This poem reminded me of a friend of mine who always said she was going to be like sunshine so thank you for reminding me of that. What an incredible poem. Thank you for sharing this.
Hi DJ,
I really like the imagery you use in this poem. I can imagine myself the feeling of the breeze, as well as the touch of the leaves. For me, it sounds like you feel alone in this poem and betrayed by someone, I hope you heal from that experience. I encourage you to continue writing with this evocative imagery and I thank you for your message.
Heartbreaking and beautiful! Love can heal and hurt and it was put together well in this piece.
This poem was written very carefully which I enjoyed. The character of the king seems to be suffering with the loss of his queen. I think the “you” in the beginning lines is referencing the queen? How she traveled far and wide to find her king. It is ironic how the queen seemed to travel all this way only to leave with the breeze. The sky and the leaves can’t believe it and I believe the reader is a little confused as well. Why would the queen do all of that just to leave? I guess it is a good symbolism of life. The line of “one touch shattered her” was beautiful. Great imagery throughout the poem! Looking forward to reading more. Hope you are having a great day.
This is beautiful! I love the imagery you used!
What beautiful use of naturalistic detail. I also love the use of other perspectives. Thank you!
I really liked the imagery in this poem, about the nature scenes and very descriptive words that made me feel I could understand the poem even more.
I love your imagery and use of nature in your poem. I love the idea of crossing the ocean and dessert because they are two opposite extremes. I also think the inclusion of the line “ and then she turned cold” because it really fits with the idea of a dessert and how it is hot in the day and cold in the night. I feel these connections you have made let your poem express the situation in a vibrant and powerful way. I also love the length of your poem because it makes me think about how things can change so quickly. Things may be one way and then in an instance, everything is different. This poem was great!
DJ,
My name is Maria Griffin, and I am a second-year student at Wayne State University in Detroit. This semester, I am taking a class whose goal is to engage with the community, beyond the university and corporations.
I really enjoyed your poem, Never Again. I have never been a poet myself, but I always found it interesting to read poems because there are so many ways they can be interpreted. This poem is filled with love and heartbreak all in one. I enjoy how it explains the great distances traveled to find the king, yet how quickly he was left along again. This interpretation and lesson can be applicable to many real-life situations. A lot of times, some things are so hard to come by, but so easy to lose, and I think this poem portrays this idea in regard to relationships.
Overall, great job, DJ! I think you may have a special talent that should be pursued. Keep up the good work and keep writing poems!
Hi DJ, your use of descriptive language here is really excellent. I like the shorter lines interspersed with the longer ones, it gives the poem an interesting cadence. Overall, really great work!
I love how DJ is able to create lush images of freedom and then illustrate it being taken away so quickly. In the first lines in poem all describe vast open spaces which makes the betrayal in the final line that much more potent. I’ve read this poem a few times now and I imagine the Queen was perhaps a significant other who was taken away from DJ against their will. To reading the line in which the Queen takes the form of water is used to highlight how essential this person was in DJ life. That brings me to the final aspect of the poem which I’ve tried thinking about for quite some time which is the character of the lavender breeze. The breeze is what took the Queen away from DJ and tricked him, but what is the breeze? Is it law enforcement? Is it violence? Is it another friend who betrayed DJ? Either way by the end of the poem it seems like DJ has lost everything after being tricked by this breeze and having his Queen taken from him. Regardless of what each of these characters represents, I finished reading this poem with a sense of loneliness and isolation. These are states which I imagine DJ is familiar, but I hope they do not stop them from continuing writing in the future.
I really like the imagery of traveling across the dessert and the sea. I also liked the imagery of the lavender breeze because I felt like i was there smelling the soft gentle lavender breeze in the air.
DJ,
I love your imagery; while I was reading it, I felt like I was next to you while this was happening. Having this strong imagery gives us so much information about what happened without explicitly sharing with us. Overall, though, I hope you’re okay! I know how hard it is to deal with the end of a relationship. Even though you are the king of alone, know that you have us looking out for you!
-Cameron
I love the imagery in your poem! It’s beautiful and conjures up distinct images in my head. I especially love how you described the “lavender breeze.”
DJ,
I love the use of imagery in your poem. even though it seems to be a personal story to you, the vagueness with which you write makes it so that it can be interpreted and apply to so many people. thank you for sharing your story!
This poem completely shocked me as this criminal who lost his love is remorsed while coming to terms with was happened. This poem shows that he cherishes what he had with this woman while cursing the unfortunate events that lead to the loss. The way he described her as a refreshing water when she came into his life is a beautiful metaphor that he expands to say she turned cold and shattered. Water turning cold and freezing in this case represents her cold body after death. This poem is vague while specific to the memories he holds. He paints a picture of his love and loss through the depiction of a nature scene which changes suddenly and tragically.
This is a beautiful poem, DJ. With your use of imagery and metaphor, I felt like I was taken to the place of pain you are coming from. Even the length of the lines made me understand how quickly things can change or how fleeting love can be. Despite how wonderful this poem is, I hope that one day you are able to use your gift to express your feelings of great happiness instead of loss.
DJ,
The imagery and description within your poem is amazing, and the way you convey emotion through those descriptions, incredible. The vast emotions I felt while reading such few lines is outstanding, and DJ, you must keep writing. Thank you for sharing with everyone.
Julia
DJ,
The imagery you use is definitely very well thought out unique, something I haven’t come across. It makes me think of the world as a whole and the beauty which encompasses it. I also like how you describe loneliness but still having a friend in the sky and leaves.
DJ,
I can feel the heart break in this poem. The imagery really brings this to life. You are great at writing! Keep up the hard work and know you are not alone even though it may feel like it.
DJ, you use of imagery was powerful and created a sense of relatability to love and the tenderness of it. Your emotion was strong yet concise. I especially liked “a Queen in the form of water to refresh my soul” as love can be so powerful it becomes essential to our lives. I know the feeling of having someone you love so much and watch them leave and this poem executed your story wonderfully.
DJ,
Your use of imagery and nature in the poem was amazing and I really loved it! Your story is very deep and I appreciate you sharing it with us all!
Thank you!
DJ,
This left me with some sort of profound emptiness. I think its crazy how much someone can come into your life when you have nothing, change it like a sunrise, but ultimately still end up leaving. I think sometimes when it comes to love you have to take it for the good and bad, but focus on the nice breeze. I hope that you can get a queen to your king of alone. But, I think this conveys so many complex emotions that it really helps to make art with. Thank you for your story!
Hi DJ, I love the imagery in this poem. I feel like I can picture the words you are saying and they are very powerful. Keep up the good work! Thanks for sharing
DJ,
You are very descriptive and the imagery you created in your writing is so lush and real. I really love poems that open me up to new perspectives by describing things that I normally would not think of in that way. I especially love the lines, “Oh dear, a Queen in the form of water to refresh my soul //
Laugh until the sun came up and then she turned cold,” I feel like they could be a poem on their own!
DJ,
I imagery and use of words was amazing. Thank you for sharing this deep piece.
Hi DJ,
I loved the imagery in your poem, I grew up in South America near the Jungle/Rain Forest and this description makes me remember how it felt in the early mornings when you were all alone and the world was quiet. Yet a soft breeze would come through and make you believe you that you weren’t alone, it felt like a companion for those few moments, but atlas it all came to an end and reality would hit. I would love to read more from you, you have a great way of making someone truly feel your words.
DJ,
I like how your imagery is solely focused on environmental factors like the ocean, water, leaves, etc. I could clearly picture everything that you were writing about. Your poem goes through a rollercoaster of emotions. It starts off with this sense of hope and wonder and all of a sudden feelings of confusion and helplessness emerge. You are very talented and I look forward to reading more of your work.
CA
What a great piece, it was very inspiring to me from a creative and emotional standpoint. I also commend the imagery you’ve used, I think it creates a lot of room for interpretation after reading your poem.
Thank you for sharing your story!
Hi DJ,
I really enjoy the imagery relating to nature. Love, in its many forms, feels so natural in so many ways that the metaphor to nature really fits this piece. I love the eloquence of your work. It makes the reader feel right there with you.
Hope you’re doing well.
I re-read your poem a few times before commenting because I really like the imagery you used. While sitting down, I was taken to a place in my mind where your words came to life as I read them. I think your story within this poem in general can be interpreted in different ways each time it is read, which is the beauty of poetry. Some people come and go in our lives like the breeze, but you reminded me how powerful love can be before it may be stripped away. Thank you for sharing your story, you are a great writer.
DJ,
Your description is so vivid. I can imagine the rainforest, the sun rising. I can envision the smell of the lavender breeze. It allows me to think about love and what it truly means. You use fantastic metaphors. My favorite line of your poem is “Then you step in path”. When someone steps into your life it is for a reason! They are either a bless or a lesson. This poem really can relate to many other people and their lives. Your writing grabs the attention of myself and with the comments, it looks like many others. Keep it up with the great poems!
Carly
Hello DJ – I really enjoyed reading this poem you wrote! I am a college student in an English class called Writing and Community where we do community outreach to connect with those around us outside of the university setting. This poem was beautiful, and there were so many great comparisons that created vivid pictures in my mind as a reader. I really liked the mention of small details, such as the “lavender breeze” which made the picture in my mind even more clear. This poem really made me feel the emotions one would expect to feel when they are with someone they love and when someone they love leaves them. I find it very impressive that you were able to convey both emotions so well in a relatively short poem. I hope that you continue to use writing and poetry as a way to express yourself and your emotions. I wish you nothing but happiness in the future!
Hi DJ,
This holds such beautiful and powerful imagery. The picture you paint is not only beautiful, but also holds so much emotion. I’m glad you could express your soul in this way. Thank you.
DJ,
I loved your poem. If I closed my eyes, I could picture every line. Your use of imagery and descriptive words made your poem come to life. Please continue to keep writing poems, your work is beautiful. Keep it up!
Hey DJ,
Love the use of nature in your poem! From what I interpreted; you’re writing about how at one point we are all alone, and then there’s this special someone that comes in and changes everything. We want all of this special someone because they are so captivating, until we realize it was all an illusion of who we wanted them to be. Then they become nothing and we’re right back to being alone. I think we can all relate to your poem. Keep writing!
Dear DJ,
You managed to fit an entire story in just a couple of lines, which is so impressive. The range of emotions you are able to express through your imagery is incredible. You have really mastered story-telling. Your poem really touched me, and took me on an emotional journey of love and heartbreak. Thank you for sharing your story!
Best,
SS
I loved the imagery you used, I feel like you appealed to all the senses using nature and scents like lavender. That was great usage of these because they make the poem more tangible. It was great how I could picture so many different things in my mind based on what you wrote! I hope you keep writing! Thanks for sharing!
This was a beautiful poem; I really liked your use of imagery for this piece! I really like your use of the dessert as a setting for this poem as it correlated well with the ending by eluding it as a mirage. As a whole it was a creatively well-made and put together poem that carries a sad, but authentic ending. Great work!
DJ,
I really like this love poem to your “Queen.” The use of nature to convey how you felt about her and your emotions was great and I enjoyed that. With the poem being short and sweet, you did a wonderful job of still telling the whole story and getting your readers to feel emotion.
It’s impressive how much emotion you can express in such a short poem. I had the feeling that I could see and smell what you were saying. The final three lines were my favorite since they both describe nature and human nature. I appreciate you creating such vivid, eye-catching poetry. I look forward to reading more of your writing.
Very beautiful poem. It is quite impressive how you use metaphors to express your love story in a short poem. It starts off with a happy tone then descends into a sad poem about how your lover was gone with the wind.
The verbalized imagery in your poem is transcending. The vivid description puts the reader into the poem. Within your first line you can feel you emotion and from there it only deepens.
This poem is very interesting and I like it because it is almost like a short story. The way you talked about your “Queen” was very intriguing to me. My favorite quote is “and a lavender breeze took her away from me” because it reads like a story. I don’t read many poems that are like this, and it is very intelligent. Keep up the great work!