Me in 23

By SH aka Sincere Echoes

Suppressed echoes
encased in sincere truths,
I lay low like fog
and touch many like raindrops
embodied by force…
I am significant

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  1. Brittani Forman on March 11, 2021 at 3:55 PM

    Dear Sincere Echoes, this poem is short yet deep. I love the metaphor to fog. You are significant! I love this poem.

  2. Ayzhiana Basallo on March 12, 2021 at 10:57 PM

    I liked how your poem was short and sweet. I did not understand it to much, but maybe sometimes we write poetry not for other people to understand but for us to express ourselves and have our own fulfillment.

  3. Jill H on March 13, 2021 at 10:29 AM

    I love the lines “I lay low like fog and touch many like raindrops…” For me, this poem had a density that gave that last line so much weight and power. Thank you for sharing your work!

  4. Joseph M. on March 14, 2021 at 7:10 PM

    Dear SH,

    Thank you for sharing this poem. I really like the idea of “laying low” but still having power. There’s a lot of tension in this poem, between suppressed echoes and their sincere truths and fog kept down but still dispersing itself widely. These contradictions make your poem so powerful and embody perfectly the way that things suggested, suppressed, or not said explicitly can be even more impactful and affecting than what is said. I hope you keep writing and sharing your poems!

    Best,
    JM

  5. jessica on March 20, 2021 at 12:05 PM

    I really love your simile use, and the strong imagery of nature that you pull into your work. I think it gives a powerful yet calming setting for your message, and I really like the ending line stating “I am significant.” It really reinforces that powerful vibe that the entirety of your work gives off.

  6. Albert Ivory on March 21, 2021 at 6:25 PM

    So profound and relatable. Love how raindrops inside a fog is incorporated to correlate with the navigation of life in a youthful age and finding the strength to find inner power in the end.

  7. Ayzhiana Basallo on March 24, 2021 at 1:31 AM

    I was wondering what you mean by your poem and if it is to be interpreted by people or for your own expression. I would like to see if you can further go with the poem so we can really see what you are feeling internally.

  8. Joe Fargo on March 25, 2021 at 10:23 PM

    Dear SH,

    Thank you for sharing this poem. Your use of imagery is incredible, and the ending line of “I am significant” is so powerful. Please continue to keep writing, and I hope you are doing well.

    -Joe

  9. Samantha on March 26, 2021 at 4:40 PM

    Sincere Echos,

    I loved the opening lines: “Suppressed echoes // encased in sincere truths”. That was such a strong start to the poem, and really grabbed my attention right away. The way it flows and slips off the tongue makes it all the more powerful. I really liked how you ended it with “I am significant”. I like how you took agency of, and really owned the fact that yes, you matter and you are significant! Very nicely done, here, I really enjoyed reading this piece.

    Best,

    Samantha

  10. Natalie Cairo on March 27, 2021 at 2:56 PM

    It was a real joy to read this poem. Sometimes in life we can get swept up in this constant state of trying to be the best we can be. To achieve great heights and if we don’t do that, our lives are insignificant. I believe that everyone is significant. Not one person can go through this world and not affect someone else. I loved the line “touch many like raindrops”. It emphasized how one person can impact so many others. Great poem!

  11. Emily on March 27, 2021 at 6:25 PM

    I like the sweet and short nature of this poem as well as the last line! Nice job!

  12. Catherine Cole on March 29, 2021 at 12:17 PM

    Hi Sincere Echos! This was a beautiful poem, I especially love the last line, “I am significant.” It really resonated with me because it is so meaningful and powerful. I appreciate you sharing this. Best, Catherine

  13. EOS on March 29, 2021 at 2:51 PM

    Hi SH/Sincere Echos,

    Thank you so much for sharing! I really enjoyed reading this poem! The use of imagery with the echos, fog, and raindrops really brings this poem to light.

    Keep writing! 🙂

    – EOS

  14. Torie Seagraves on March 30, 2021 at 9:49 AM

    What a brief yet descriptive use of words!

  15. AYDEN JOZWIK on March 30, 2021 at 1:12 PM

    I love the duality of this poem between the first 5 lines and the final thought. SH speaks of being suppressed and silenced by the environment they are trapped in. Prison is a place which strips them of their individuality and forces them to restrain themselves or face further consequences. SH seems to be fully aware of this dynamic but is remaining headstrong in their refusal to lose themselves in this place. The final line: I am significant is about as strong of a proclamation that can be made that they will not forget who they are or that their life still has immense value even if they are trapped in a system that wants them to think otherwise.

  16. Ashlen on March 30, 2021 at 6:54 PM

    Sincere Echoes – Thank you so much for your poetry! I love the imagery you used. You conveyed so much in such a short amount of time, and I think you are really talented for the way you paint a picture with your words. You are significant! – Ashlen

  17. DW on April 1, 2021 at 1:18 PM

    This is so powerful. YOU ARE significant and have so much to offer the world. Thank you for being you and sharing your art.

  18. ken on April 2, 2021 at 1:19 PM

    I really enjoyed this poem! It was short and deep. The way you compared yourself to different things that were dark and cold made it an even more amazing poem. It is a very powerful poem. Keep up the good work and never stop writing!

  19. aprile on April 3, 2021 at 11:44 AM

    I really enjoyed the imagery of the fog moving close to the ground and the rain falling. I liked how the echos were described as encased it almost felt like I could hear the echo in a cave.

  20. Linda on April 4, 2021 at 12:57 PM

    I love this imagery, and the powerfulness of being more behind the scene and everywhere but still so present and powerful. With enough empowerment and embodied force, the impact of thousands of raindrops can be super significant. I like how I feel like even if you are not at the forefront and are suppressed in the background, if you are there and inn quantity, there’s so much power.

  21. maggie on April 4, 2021 at 8:58 PM

    I liked the message of identity between this poem, and the expressions used! This was really well written thank you for sharing!

  22. Cameron on April 5, 2021 at 10:42 AM

    SH,

    I love this poem! You do such a great job painting a picture in my mind—I love the imagery, specifically how you touch many like raindrops. It’s such a small, but meaningful exchange. However, my favorite part is definitely the meaning; the agency that you give yourself is so powerful. You are significant!

    -Cameron

  23. Peyton Puma on April 5, 2021 at 5:53 PM

    The word choice and diction in this poem is great, it really makes you feel something. I feel like I am walking in your shoes from the words you chose and your descriptions. I loved how even though most of this poem had a more negative feel to it and was dark, you ended with I am significant. No matter what someone is facing or how small someone may try to make you feel, your message of I am significant is so important because nothing can take that away from you. What a person goes through or what others say about them does not make them any less of a person, you are still significant.

  24. Lauren on April 6, 2021 at 10:21 PM

    I really enjoyed this poem! I like how you discuss the theme of personal significance. Whether we know it or not, we all impact the people we interact with. Even if we tend to sit in the shadows or not speak up, we are all significant in our own ways.

  25. Julia Rinaldi on April 8, 2021 at 8:44 PM

    SH,

    The amount of emotion I could feel through these few words is so impactful. You are so significant, and your life means the world to many. I feel that the words you write relate to the confinement you feel day to day, and it aches my heart. You’re poetry is beautifully written and you need to continue writing. Thank you for sharing.

    Julia

  26. MM on April 8, 2021 at 10:12 PM

    Hello there, your poem, short but sweet, struck a cord with me. This quote comes to mind, “Silence at the proper season is wisdom, and better than any speech” – Pultarch. Sometimes there is more power in being silent like in your poem you describe how although you may be quiet, you still have the ability to make a change and speak your truth. I enjoyed reading and I am excited to see more from you!

  27. Maria Griffin on April 12, 2021 at 10:14 AM

    SH aka Sincere Echoes,
    My name is Maria Griffin, and I am a second-year student at Wayne State University in Detroit. This semester, I am taking a class whose goal is to engage with the community, beyond the university and corporations.
    Your poem about identity titled, Me in 23, is very powerful. It is short in length but left me with great wonder. The few words have such great meaning and resonance. The description of someone who likes to “lay low like fog,” and sort of watch from a distance hit close to home because I am like that. I love how you ended with “I am significant.” It gives encouragement to people like me who are wallflowers, because we are significant, and we touch more lives than we think. Your poem is both powerful and encouraging to your audience.
    Overall, great job! Keep up the good work. I know you will continue to encourage your audience with great work.

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