Haikus
By KS
I had awakened and it felt
Like a rainy day
yet the clouds had nothing
to say
They spend most of the day
just passing by
Tagged with nature
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AS,
I can feel the waiting in your words. I can feel how stuck one might feel. I know rainy days will come for you but so will sunny days. I hope the sunny days outnumber the rainy ones.
KC
I like this haiku, KS. It gives good perspective that while we may think or perceive of something as one way, maybe it’s not. Keep writing, hope to read more haikus from you.
In this poem by KS he is talking about when he wakes up its a rainy day. A rainy day usually means its a sad depressing day. KS talks about how the clouds had nothing to say. Does that mean there are no clouds in the sky? Or there is clouds but it’s just raining? His day seems very slow and sad as he just watches the clouds pass by.
This feels so powerful in 3 main parts. It shows that some days are not always as bad as they seem at first.
I also quite feel like I have nothing else to say, great writing I re-read it many times and I hope not all of your days are as bad as they seem!
I like how subtly sad and mellow this poem is. It still manages to instill a sense of peace. It gives off a vibe of sitting at a bay window with a cup of warm coffee and just cloud gazing – thinking it’s going to rain, but surprisingly, it doesn’t.
Hi! I love how much depth you have added to your simple Haiku poem. As a child, I always used to write Haiku poems because they seemed fun to write with the pattern they consisted of. Poems about nature always seem very interesting as they tend to be very observant of nature and its wonders.
You keep closely with the syllables needed for a haiku. Which is hard to do, showing the importance of the words used. Tying your emotions with the weather was a great way to enhance your writing without using so many words. Most can relate to a rainy day, without having to go into much detail, because most have experienced it.
This is short but sweet!
KS out of all of the poems that I have read yours has to be my favorite when it comes to symbolism. We all have those rainy days in our heads and not everyone will always have rainy days as well. There are times where we need people in our lives and just to sit down and talk to them is something very crucial. But of course they too could be having there own busy days as well and not be there. Or also we could just need to vent to anyone but nobody will because they’re judging that book by its cover.
hello KS, I love haikus. I feel the short-written piece always has so much to say in such few words. I also love nature so anything embracing the beauty or curiosity of it makes me the reader drawn in. This poem reminded me of the days I had woken up wishing it was a rainy day, just because I felt like I needed one. Sometimes I feel like I need a moment for myself to collect my thoughts and find peace for myself to make up for the days I couldn’t. I think everyone deserves to have those kinds of days. Listening to the rain fall, refreshing the earth, cleaning it away with a light shower. Just a simple thing that occurs naturally within our world brings so much joy, and relaxation. However as much as we need them, we have not always granted them, and we must compose ourselves and keep on moving for the better sakes of ourselves. We can only wish we are rewarded for all the work and stress we put ourselves through. Although I like to believe grass is greener on the other side, and sometimes to experience that fun, blissful encounter you must sit through those boring, hard days. thank you for sharing this haiku it truly was beautiful.
i wish you the best- Aaliyah!
KS,
This poem makes me reflect on all the worst-case-scenarios that my anxiety spawns in my mind every day. In my head these scenarios become real, and it feels like a rainy day. I see the silent clouds you write of as the reality of the world around me when things never go as bad as I imagined. I’ll get so worked up in the moments leading up to a dreaded imagined scenario, only to get there and the moment to be simply ‘just passing by’. This is a brilliant way of articulating such an impossible feeling.
Nature is unique and unpredictable. It can be hot this minute and cold the next. Raining and the sun shining at the same time. 🙂 I am also fascinated by the mystery behind nature.
Love that you went for a light-hearted poem. It super short but it doesn’t have to be. It sounds like your telling me a story. I think it would have been cool if you put passing away to create a rhyming poem. away, day and say . And passing away could mean passing away from you and passing away as in they fly and are never really seen the same way again.
Your words are short but powerful. I enjoy these short sweet poems and I think you did a great job!
KS,
Your poem shows the struggle of how our days can be painful and empty. I am getting from this that you are comparing your feelings to a rainy day, and how the clouds have nothing to say means you may feel like you may be overwhelmed and not always have the words for how you are feeling, or maybe your peers don’t know what to say sometimes either. I want you to know it is okay to feel like this, even though I may not know your story, your emotions are valid. Suppressing emotions, leads one to not grow and move on from their hurt. Even if right now you feel very down, you are already working on a change by allowing yourself to hurt. When you are in it, you might not see that or feel like you will never get out of this. I want you to know you are so strong, and that I have the faith you will come across better days. Days that feel sunny and eventful. Writing feelings out is a step towards recovery.
Hi KS,
I like how your poem is short and sweet. The way you described the clouds as if they were actual people is really cool. This represents that the “clouds” did not want anything to “say.”
Hi KS! I love this poem, it’s short and sweet yet uses beautiful imagery to paint a clear mental picture in as few words as possible, which takes skill. I also love the subtle rhyme scheme embedded in it (day/say/day) and how you broke the rhyme for the very last line, so it made those final words even more punctuating and impactful. This is a lovely little poem with a lot of natural beauty emanating from a few meticulously chosen words. Great job, I’d love to read more like this in the future! Nature poems are my favorite.
KS,
Thank you for your lovely haiku! I can picture the sky you describe. A feeling of unmet anticipation is created. It makes the world feel surreal. Thank you for sharing this!
Hey KS, I really enjoyed this poem. Even though It was short and simple, it was still wonderful to read and quite powerful. Thank your for sharing.
I love small, simple poetry like this one. I can relate to your difficulties as well as other people’s. Continue writing; I’m looking forward to reading your other poetry!
Hi KS,
This poem created such vivid imagery for me. While reading, I’m able to picture myself in this setting you’ve created. This poem makes me think of waking up cold, looking outside and seeing that it’s very cloudy and overall gloomy, but no rain. This poem also creates vivid feelings for me, because I associate that weather with a general feeling of gloominess, tiredness, etc., and I feel that reading this poem allows me to briefly feel these feelings. Amazing job creating a scene through your language, thank you for sharing!
Ainsley
Even though this poem is short, there is still enough emotion to be found in this piece of literature. A short poem, but enough to build the imagery and sense as if you were waiting for something.
I really liked the imagery that this poem had! Describing the weather outside creates emotion and feelings in the reader. Nature is symbolic and can be used to create a sense of meaning in all sorts of directions and I think you did a great job incorporating it. Keep up the great work!
Thank you for sharing! The poem was so powerful and the words used were so creative. The descriptiveness on the weather and sky was something I really appreciate, it so amazing to take time and appreciate the world and its beauty.
This poem shows how unpredictable nature is, but that is its beauty of. It is short but very powerful
Great wordplay! I love how it displays the reality that despite how the day is presented, we have a different perspective and approach to it.
Haiku poems are one of my favorite types of poems because they deliver such a strong message. This poem gives off a very lonely tone because you talk about it feeling like a rainy day, but the clouds had nothing to say and the day was long. One thing about this poem that I really like is the imagery and how the clouds and the sky paints a picture in my head. Keep up the great writing work!
This poem does a great job with creating a simple yet powerful setting and image for the reader. The simplicity of the poem allows the reader to interpret it in many different ways. This poem could mean so many different things to different people, which I believe is such an amazing quality for any work of writing to have. it is refreshing to see a short yet powerful poem which allows the reader to really think deeply about what it could mean and use their own past experiences to decipher the poem.
Your words really speak how you are feeling and I could feel those feelings too. I think there are some days that feel like rainy days no matter how sunny it is outside. Your mindset and you emotions can feel like weather. Sometimes it’s sunny and sometimes it’s rainy. Watching clouds can sometimes be a peaceful thing to do in my opinion because it makes you feel more patient with the world. Thank you for sharing your words.
This is the definition of short and sweet. Everyone has bad days sometimes, but that doesn’t mean it’s a bad day for the rest of the world. If you feel like you’re having a rainy day, someone else might feel like it’s the perfect weather outside. This poem has a bigger picture than weather, and it is shown in the short yet powerful wording.
This poem does a great job creating a powerful image for myself. It is so simple but yet it really makes you feel a certain way and there are so many different ways you can that it can be interpreted. This is a beautiful piece of work. Although it can be analyzed many ways I feel that I understand exactly how you meant it.
I really like Haiku poems because they are short and sweet but can portray a strong message. Through just a few words, I understand the uncertain part of nature. I also really enjoy the imagery and picture you were able to paint.
I love haikus and this one is very peaceful and calming with how it talks about the clouds and how serene they are in the sky.
Short but powerful piece. Really open to interpretation. The message I saw was waiting for something to happen and the slowness time can take sometimes. Enjoyable read.
Hi KS,
I really enjoyed your poem and the simplicity it offers while explaining the human emotion and environment, as it opens up much discussion on interpretation. From my point of view, your statement “I had awakened and it felt Like a rainy day” even though as the poem continues it was not really a rainy day shows the disconnect between how we feel and our actual surroundings. I feel as though this is applicable in every day situations where we feel things that don’t exactly correlate with what’s happening around us.
Hi!
So, I want to start by saying that I really love how simple this poem is. I feel like there isn’t a crazy backstory or a hinted message. I really enjoyed reading a poem that was just a beautiful description of something real. I think everyone has felt like it was a rainy day even though it was not raining. Sometimes rainy days can be bad days, but they can also be good days.
Great Job!
This poem is so simple and I love it. it was really nice and an easy read. I was curious if there was another meaning to this? Almost seems like its another way of describing your day. Beautiful piece and I really enjoyed it.
I can feel the way you feel stuck in this poem. And I can imagine the clouds you see passing by while outside or from your window. I’m sorry you feel this way and I hope that by writing these poems it helps you ease your mind a little.
I think choosing to write this as a haiku was very powerful. It shows the sort of “passing by” you talk about in the last line
Hello! Thank you for this powerful and delightful poem. I like how this poem portrays the idea that we often jump to conclusions based on appearances, and we can sometimes be wrong. Not all days are rainy just because the clouds are grey, and the shade they provide can oftentimes be a good thing as these clouds simply make there way. Please keep up the great work, and I hope to read more from you in the future.
You know that I love Haikus and all the different forms of poetry. It’s amazing how this imagery affects a person’s perspective. One person might feel positive with clouds in the sky like no more bright sun shining into my eyes with no sunburn while another person feels negative about the clouds meaning rain and sadness falling down from the sky. At least you awakened even if it seems like a rainy day. Yet the clouds had nothing to say or prove is like it is what it is. They just spent most of their day flying and soaring like it was no body else’s business while wasting all the time in the world.
I think this poem explains much depth and has numerous things it could apply to. Knowing your situation I think it explains that feeling of being trapped and alone. I love the symbolism of the clouds. I enjoyed your poem and I hope you continue to create more.
I love reading poems that stick to a certain form or pattern! I love how you were able to keep the impact fulness and flow of your poem, while sticking to the required length of the stanza and lines! This was impressive! Thank you for sharing!
I’ve been feeling a similar way recently. Even with the sunny day, it feels like I’m just passing time. I hope we’re both able to find a way to make the clouds disappear
That feeling of gloom awakening to a rainy day is depicted so accurately and is something most people relate to. While using minimal words to convey this specific mood and emotion it was still depicted so clearly. The brevity of the poem adds to its simplicity and allows the reader to focus on the central image and emotions behind it. I think there could be multiple interpretations of this that everyone can draw a connection to and that’s so beautiful.
Reading through the different poems and works here and getting to read Haiku is a welcomed change of pace. I like the bittersweet feelings this haiku gives me, Waking up and wanting the day to be as miserable as you feel, yet getting met with bright and sunny skies. I like how short and sweet this haiku is, it gets straight to the point and lays a blanket of feeling over you. It makes you feel like the rainy weather that is yearned for, combined with the laid back observance the ending gives. Thank you for the Haiku KS!
This poem was short and held a lot of imagery and created a peaceful, but gloomy mood. This is especially hard to do within the limitations of a haiku so that is very impressive! To me I read that peace does not always have to be sunny and there is going to be gloominess to a journey but you have to keep passing by.
KS, This poem really allowed my imagination to flow and to dive into a more peaceful element of my life. When thinking about clouds they are constantly moving and sometimes our mood depends on the weather. When the weather doesn’t match our mood, we wonder what outside factors are causing the shift in our moods.
I like how the poem was short and simple to underscore the fact that the day is going by slowly, but if the poem was longer, a good idea I would suggest to continue it is that the day also goes by quickly and there’s not much time left in one’s lifetime to do things. Great job!
KS, The amount of depth this poem has for being on the shorter size is empowering. How it encapsulates that not all days are full of rainbows and sunshine, but can be a bit gloomy.
Feeling gloomy on a non gloomy day can feel depressing, i have those days as well but trying to make the best of what you have and say “tomorrow will be better” seems to me a better way to look to the future.
Sometimes life feels like this. You’re craving something more, but things just go by quietly. It can be frustrating and confusing, it feels like a person is missing out sometimes. I’m not sure the resolution to this, but I think you encompassed this feeling really well and it feels reassuring to know this is a relatable feeling.
I appreciate your courage to share how you feel in such a difficult emotional position. Half the struggle with feeling this way is finding the words to express the feelings that come with it. Keep up the great work!
I like the personification of the clouds, and the phrase just passing by is funny in this context
Hi KS,
I had to sit with this poem for a while. I could picture everything you were saying, but it made me feel so many things—ennui, loss, annoyance. It made me think of knowing something could happen or should happen but it doesn’t, and it’s almost like the world is laughing in your face. I also love the personification of the clouds because it emphasizes the connection you have to them and the ability you have to communicate with them. You said so much in so few words!
Thank you for sharing this poem. Even though the poem was short it was very deep.
KS,
This haiku has great meaning and includes words that create beautiful imagery. The way that you use your words allows me to easily imagine that I am in the setting that you have described. Evoking powerful emotions is difficult with a short poem like a haiku, but you have done it with this peace. You did an amazing job with this poem. It was a pleasure to read. Thank you! Keep up the good work!