Dream

By AH

Dedicated to my daughter

Yesterday, I had a dream about a girl
She was light skin like me
She possessed my eyes
My hair
My lips
My feet
And every time that she smiled
I smiled
Every time that she cried
I cried
Each tear feeling like invincible bullets tearing
into my flesh
Leaving behind a painful mess
Yes, yesterday I had a dream about a girl
and the dream was over before I could
pull her close to my heart
It was over
Before I could tell her my story
Tell her my part
God I pray for the chance to see her again
So I am going back to bed in hope of dreamin
about the girl that looks like me
again

48 Comments

  1. Samantha on June 29, 2021 at 8:53 PM

    AH,

    What a beautiful poem for your daughter!! I too, hope that you are able to see her again some day. The line you wrote, “Each tear feeling like invincible bullets tearing into my flesh”, was so powerful yet heartbreaking. We could really feel the pain behind that line! Thank you for sharing with us!

    Best,

    Samantha

  2. Yasemin on July 14, 2021 at 4:28 PM

    This is a really beautiful poem. I especially loved how to related her tears to yours and them tearing you down. All this just to rebuild you into who you were meant to be, an amazing father.

  3. Madison White on July 15, 2021 at 11:51 AM

    Wow. Your poem conveys such powerful emotions. This must have been very difficult to write based on such a heavy feeling this must have been to wake up from this dream. Your line “Each tear feeling like invincible bullets tearing into my flesh” gives off such powerful imagery and makes the reader really feel your pain. Thank you for sharing this. Well done!

  4. Pravar on July 20, 2021 at 1:04 PM

    Wonderful poem, very emotional, keep up the good work!

  5. Lily on August 9, 2021 at 11:11 AM

    I really enjoyed how parts of your poem rhymed throughout. The poem flowed really well and kept me intrigued. Great job with this poem!

  6. Maxine Cassell on August 18, 2021 at 9:31 PM

    AH,

    I love the descriptive way you wrote this poem. You picked the perferct words to describe your dream. When reading this poem I picture you are looking in a mirror and seeing a younger version of yourself. It is a very touching poem and sorrowful. Don’t stop writing.

  7. Alex waltman on August 19, 2021 at 10:20 AM

    I really enjoyed this. It helps me understand my own parents love for me. I’m starting to miss them and I’m sure your daughter misses you too. Stay well.

  8. Soumyaa on August 19, 2021 at 10:20 AM

    Hi AH,

    This poem really touched my heart. As a daughter that recently moved far away from my father, I can relate to what you write about the strong father-daughter connection and the pain that comes with being away from them. I truly love my father and I can say with certainty that your daughter loves you in the same way. I hope your dreams continue to provide a sanctuary for you and always know that your daughter is thinking of you in her own dreams. I will pray that you get to meet in her in person one day.

  9. Anna on August 19, 2021 at 10:23 AM

    This poem is beautifully written. It’s obvious how much you care for your daughter. The imagery and descriptive writing made me imagine all of it in my head. I even teared up a bit. I love my dad, and I would be so touched if he ever wrote something like this dedicated to me. I truly hope you see your daughter soon, because you most definitely are a major source of light in her life.

  10. Brigitte on August 19, 2021 at 10:28 AM

    I absolutely love this poem
    I never really think about the future or remember my dreams
    So this must have been really impactful on you
    My mom always tells me when I fell pain or happiness so does she, it’s what parents do
    Good parents understand us in a different level and it’s comforting to know they will be around seven if we feel lonely
    I can tell you will be a great father to your future child

  11. Kate on August 19, 2021 at 10:31 AM

    Your writing made me feel like I was seeing the girl appear in front of me, too. I love how you described your daughter and I could tell how much she meant to you. I just went away to college and I’m really missing my mom, too (even though I know it’s not the same as what you’re going through at all), and your poem definitely made me tear up a little. Stay strong, keep writing, and I hope you see her very soon.

  12. Joy on August 19, 2021 at 10:34 AM

    I love this poem about your love for your daughter. I love the line “Each tear feeling like invincible bullets tearing
    into my flesh” because I love the metaphor of tears and bullets. Thank you for sharing your love with your daughter to the world and I hope you are able to see her one day to tell her your love for her.

  13. Sophia on August 19, 2021 at 10:35 AM

    If I could, I’d give you a dreamcatcher to catch all the bad, unwanted dreams, leaving you only with dreams about her.

  14. Hannah on August 19, 2021 at 10:41 AM

    AH, this is such a beautiful, heartfelt poem for your daughter. I can’t imagine what it must feel like to not be able to see her everyday. I hope one day she will be able to visit you and soon after you can be reunited. – Hannah

  15. Julia Bruffey on September 19, 2021 at 6:33 PM

    Wow, this poem really made me feel something. I love the compassion put into it, describing how you feel what she feels even though you can’t see her right now. Keep your head up, and keep writing, because this poem was beautiful!

  16. Mona Villesvik on September 20, 2021 at 3:28 PM

    AH,

    Thank you for sharing your story, and for your words about your daughter. I can feel and sense how much you love and care for her just through this poem. I have hope that you will see your daughter again soon!

    Stay strong!

    Mona

  17. ZP on October 17, 2021 at 7:12 PM

    This is a beautiful poem dedicated to your daughter, and I can really feel the unfaltering love you feel for her. Keep writing and conveying your feelings this is really amazing.

  18. Bhavin C Narotam on October 18, 2021 at 1:29 AM

    This poem was very deep and touching. You can feel the love that the man has for his daughter. I hope they reunited someday. Keep writing this was very good.

  19. Divyaa Matta on October 18, 2021 at 10:40 PM

    I love this poem. Thank you for sharing about your daughter. Your love emanates through the lines of this poem and I cannot imagine going through this tough time. I implore you to stay strong!

  20. Chynel on November 2, 2021 at 1:07 PM

    This is a poem I will remember for a long time. It is so powerful and moving and made me feel a wide range of emotions. I hope you and your daughter are soon reunited, either in dreams or in person. Please keep writing–you have a real gift for it!

  21. Reese on November 9, 2021 at 9:19 PM

    This is an incredibly moving poem. I can really tell how much you love your daughter, and I hope you’re able to see her soon. The part where you said “the dream was over before I could / pull her close to my heart” made me miss my own father and has inspired me to reach out to him more. Keep writing!

  22. Nina Austria on November 9, 2021 at 9:35 PM

    AH, this poem is heart-breaking and I could definitely feel the emotions behind your words. The way you describe your desire to see her again really touched me, and it is clear to me how much you love your daughter. Keep your head up; I really do hope you get the chance to reunite with her soon! Until then, keep writing!!!

  23. Lindsey on November 11, 2021 at 1:19 AM

    This poem is absolutely beautiful. It made me think of my dad and everything I see in myself that I admire about him. This is such a wonderful poem for your daughter. This poem is so full of compassion and true love. The words are so descriptive and well thought out. It is like a song. I hope you may see your daughter again someday. Keep up the good work, you are truly amazing!

  24. Mary on November 17, 2021 at 1:07 PM

    This is a really beautiful poem! It’s very raw and emotional. The connection you wrote about between you and your daughter, how you look alike, is really touching.

  25. Flynn on December 3, 2021 at 1:35 PM

    AH, This poem is very moving, and I hope you get to see your daughter again soon as you would without a doubt do anything for her. Keep writing about her, that way you won’t forget any little detail about her.

  26. Francisco Salinas on December 6, 2021 at 11:26 PM

    Hi AH. I am a student in university in a class where we actively engage in communities. What is important about that is I do not have any children of my own. Yet I still felt heartbroken when you wrote about the dream ending and the loss of a relationship. This poem really highlights the importance of family relationships, and I would like to thank you for capturing this moment for me. Took me five minutes of thinking, and I came to the thought that if I ever had children of my own, I plan on holding every moment. All the happiness. All the joy. All the sadness. All the arguments. Everything. The whole package. I thank you for your inspiring story, and I do hope you see her again.

  27. Uwase Blessed on December 17, 2021 at 10:13 PM

    Hey AH,
    I really love your poem, it sounds so artistically beautiful. I hope you get to speak to your daughter, you obviously love and care about her very much.

  28. Roxanne on January 8, 2022 at 11:35 PM

    Dear AH, the pain of a family separated is one that I wish that no one had to feel, I’m sorry that you have to experience it. I can sense the frustration, yearning and sorrow you feel from your beautiful poem. I really hope that you’re able to make this wish to be reunited come true sooner rather than later. There is a daughter out there who also longs for her mother. Your love shines through your words and I hope you daughter is able to feel that warmth. Sending you love and peace! Best wishes, Roxanne

  29. Maddie on January 10, 2022 at 10:55 PM

    That was beautiful. I hope that you get to see your daughter soon! She must mean so much to you as it is obvious how much you love and care about her through your poem. Also, great metaphors! The writing is very good

  30. Bradley Wu on February 27, 2022 at 6:31 PM

    AH, this is a beautiful poem. It evokes an emotional image in my mind of your love for your daughter and the pain of not being able to see her. You have perfectly encapsulated the loving relationship of a father and daughter. Thank you for sharing this with us.
    – Bradley

  31. Robert D on March 3, 2022 at 4:02 PM

    I love this poem, I think it really hit home for me. The wording you used I can understand how you are feeling. Keep it up!!

  32. Talia on March 31, 2022 at 10:08 PM

    Such a beautiful poem, AH! You express such a strong connection with your daughter, and I love how you describe your closeness, in mind and appearance. It makes it all the more powerful when you say that what is left is sharing your story. Please continue writing, this poem is so moving!

  33. HJ on April 15, 2022 at 11:25 AM

    I felt such emotion reading this. Having such a love for your daughter and hope for reconnection reveals hope for future days. Wishing you all the best in your relationship with her. Thank you for sharing!

  34. Kaitlyn R. on April 24, 2022 at 5:35 PM

    AH, your poem about your daughter is beautiful. I also hope you get to see her one day soon. The bond of father and daughter is strong, I hope she will listen to your story with her whole heart and you guys can begin on a clean slate. I cannot imagine what you’re going through, but I admire that you hold onto that hope of seeing your daughter. Some people don’t have a lot to keep them going, so I’m glad you have your daughter. Thank you for sharing your story.

  35. Zach on April 26, 2022 at 10:24 AM

    Amazing and super heartfelt poem! You had such great word choice that made me feel your pain and feelings towards your daughter. I hope you see her again soon!

  36. Gracie on May 9, 2022 at 9:57 AM

    This is a beautiful poem! I really hope you are able to see your daughter soon!

  37. Kora on May 31, 2022 at 11:12 PM

    AH,
    this is really beautiful. The way you write about the tears and crying is like a mirror of actions between yourself and your daughter. Also, the last few lines about separation are my favorite part of the piece. I also pray you get to see your daughter again, pull her close, and that she will know just how much you love her. This is a beautiful tribute for your love of her.

  38. Paula Pamias on August 6, 2022 at 9:50 PM

    Dear AH,
    I really liked how you expressed your strong love for you daughter in this poem. For example, the simile in the line “Each tear feeling like invincible bullets tearing into my flesh” is very effective at demonstrating the great connection you have with her by comparing your pain to the power of bullets. Being a daughter myself, I can confirm the connection between my father is very powerful and special, there is nothing quite like it and I am sure your daughter feels the same way about you too.

    I really hope you can get to see her soon!

  39. Meghan on October 13, 2022 at 10:15 PM

    Wow, this poem is very detailed and personal. I really liked how you repeated the important words when you smiled and when you cried. A daughter is someone special to have and to cherish as much valuable time with her as you can. Think of your daughter before you do anything, and make the right choices for her!

  40. Ruby on October 24, 2022 at 7:47 PM

    Hi AH, this is so vulnerable and passionate. The way you describe your daughter is beautiful. As a daughter myself, it’s so sweet to hear these words coming from a father. I’m sorry you are separated, I’m sure she misses you too. Keep writing so that someday you can share this with her.

  41. Anna on October 30, 2022 at 6:58 PM

    AH, this poem was so incredibly powerful! I am so sorry you aren’t able to see your daughter but I hope you will get to soon! I don’t have any kids but I can imagine how hard that must be. Just stay strong and I am sure you will get to see her soon! Thank you for sharing this!!

  42. Victoria on November 20, 2022 at 2:54 PM

    AH, your ability to articulate the unconditional love one feels for their child and the overwhelming joy and pain that comes with creating life outside of yourself is so moving. Similarly, the grief that you express in being separated from someone you love is excruciatingly heartbreaking. As a woman, the love I have for my mother is indescribable; I have no doubt your daughter feels the same about you. Thank you for sharing this beautiful and vulnerable moment.

  43. eleni on February 11, 2023 at 7:50 PM

    This poem blew me away with how powerful the emotions behind it are. The analogy of dreaming of a girl who looks like you and going to bed hoping to dream of her again is so brilliant and powerful. The lines, “And every time that she smiled, I smiled. Every time that she cried, I cried, Each tear feeling like invincible bullets tearing into my flesh,” speaks volumes to how hard it is for parents to see their kids suffering and how happy it makes them to see their kids thrive. From beginning to end, this poem is just brilliant with the overall analogy, the imagery, and the word choice. So beautiful!

  44. Oshane on February 14, 2023 at 7:48 PM

    Hi AH,

    Touching poem,
    A wonderful expression of your love for your daughter and your deep connection to her.
    Your daughter must miss you as much as you miss her. I hope that you are reunited soon.

  45. Kearsten on February 17, 2023 at 12:32 AM

    This was a beautiful poem about your daughter. You so eloquently articulated you’re unconditional love for her, and how much you miss her. The way you describe dreaming of her so clearly states you much your heart is broken from being away from her. I hope you get to see your little girl again, and I wish you both peace, love and happiness. Best wishes.

  46. PH on March 22, 2023 at 8:28 PM

    You and your daughter seem so in sync and like the perfect match! Yeah separation is so tough to deal with but at least you won’t forget her ever and will dream of her which is so powerful.

  47. Matthew Handley on April 9, 2023 at 11:07 PM

    I can really feel your love for your daughter in this poem. The imagery is beautiful and I can feel the depth of the warmth you feel for your daughter. Your writing is eloquent and I hope to read more from you in the future. Love is a powerful thing, and I know your daughter feels the same about you.

  48. hannah on April 15, 2023 at 5:22 PM

    AWWWWW i love my dad so much and this made me think of him. I love seeing parent child relationships from the other way because I see the adoration from that side. I hope you see your child again.

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