Untitled (Eager)
By BA
Eager to be in the wind, and to swim with no doubt.
Thoughts becoming perplexed, and never living in doubt.
Eager to be free, eager to see.
To fly beyond the sky’s seeking the entitling of times.
To cross the Serengeti in destitute times. “The mind”.
“Eternity”, to become eager with your mind.
Eager to show who I’ve become.
Eager to shine just as the sun.
Eager to win “we won”.
Eager to end we begun
Living life under the sun
Did you know the mind took time to grow, with eagerness it was created.
Struggling times, never allowing life to consume the mind, with eagerness we overcame.
So here we come, we overcame.
I thought of you last night, I thought of what you became
When I dreamed, I awoke calling your name,
The Fire in me, to love you forever.
No matter what, I chose to never give up.
I chose to shine bright, not just on you, “but everyone”.
Eagerness in the sun, soul, and mind, conquering destitute barriers inside your mind.
Red Roses, Blue Skies, and a Eager Mind.
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It’s good that even despite such hardship you’re eager to overcome it! This poem really shows how no matter what life throws at you, you can always manage to overcome it and come back stronger.
We are born to love, and we are born to shine bright. Life is never smooth, and is always filled with obstacles. We all secretly have the strength and will, and confidence to do many good and great things in life. Sometimes we just need a little push from someone to make all those happen. And that we can shine bright, we can set our minds free, we can show the world what we are capable of. And we can live to love ourselves and others.
Your poem radiates with a powerful sense of eagerness and determination. It speaks of a profound desire for freedom, self-discovery, and the relentless pursuit of overcoming life’s challenges. The imagery you use, from flying beyond the sky to crossing the Serengeti, symbolizes a boundless aspiration for exploration and breaking barriers.
The connection between the mind’s growth and the strength derived from struggles is beautifully portrayed, highlighting the resilience of the human spirit. Your unwavering determination to love, shine, and never give up, not just for one person but for everyone, reflects a selfless and compassionate mindset.
The mention of red roses, blue skies, and an eager mind adds a touch of vivid imagery, capturing the essence of hope, beauty, and intellectual curiosity. Your poem is an inspiring testament to the strength that comes from within and the eagerness to embrace life’s challenges with a positive and open heart. Thank you for sharing this heartfelt and uplifting piece.
I love the details, metaphors, and similes you have used to describe your feelings. It gives the reader a better understanding of the meaning behind this poem. I love how you used the word eager over and over to show your excitement and dedication to better yourself.
Seeing and living through barbed wire is difficult as shown in this piece of art. “No matter what I chose to never give up” living a different way with a routine and making the best of what you have is the only way to get through it. This poem really encourages others in the same position to see the sun through the clouds. The use of rhythm and rhyming really is great. I wish the writer used that throughout the whole poem. Overall, really good.
BA I love how your words are filled with pure determination, and positivity. It encompasses your inner thoughts and goals perfectly. Keep that eagerness alive, and keep shining like the sun and break down those barriers. You got this 🙂
Hello BA,
Great poem! I think you did a great job here. The repetition of “eager to” in the third section was wonderful, and felt really powerful. I think the first two lines over the poem are a great way to open it. The first two lines are very very relatable as well. You did a great job with this piece, I hope to see more work of yours!
It’s good that you’re eager to prove yourself to your friends and family! Change is a good thing and it’s wonderful that you’re excited to show them how much you’ve changed!
It brilliantly conveys the electric energy of anticipation, and the joy that comes from embracing new experiences and opportunities with an open heart. It encourages us to relish the zest for life, inspiring us to welcome each day with eagerness and a keen sense of curiosity, knowing that the world is full of possibilities waiting to be explored.
Inspirational! Reminds me of my dad!
This poem really conveys the pull of emotions that you express. The use of repetition in the 3rd stanza really emphasizes the longing that “Eager” suggests. This poem brought to light the simplicity of gratefulness in life, and I hope that you continue to write and share your stories and sentiments.
The repetition of “Eager to” in subsequent stanzas reinforces the speaker’s determination to show personal growth, shine like the sun, win, and ultimately bring an end to the journey that was begun.
I love this poem. I love the word eager you chose to center your words and imagery around. I feel like sometimes in life it is so easy to get stuck in a rut or the same routine over and over again, but every once in a while I will experience such an urge to do more. The eagerness to prove myself, to experience life in a brighter, more colorful way, to reach out and live. I feel like this poem encompasses this feeling so well, so it feels good to have it have been put into words.
I love how well you were able to rhyme the words. You told a story very clearly and sparked inspiration. Keep writing, you are great!
I love this. I think its amazing that you are so eager to grow and find yourself. This poem shows the beauty of hope, and the power of believing you can overcome hardships.
I like the imagery of the serengeti. by using the red roses and the blue sky
This poem is a captivating exploration of eagerness, determination, and the enduring power of the human spirit. The poem beautifully explores themes of eagerness, triumph over adversity, love, and the interconnectedness of the human experience. The use of vivid imagery and heartfelt expressions makes it a compelling and uplifting piece.
Your poem beautifully captures the essence of hope, resilience, and the power of the mind. The imagery of eagerness and overcoming struggles is inspiring. It’s clear that you have a strong spirit and determination to shine bright and make a positive impact. Keep holding on to that fire within you!
To BA, I absolutely love the voice I read this in. So much resonates, so much astounding respect for the dreamer who created this poem. Thank you for this lovely read.
Your poem beautifully captures the essence of hope, resilience, and the power of the mind. It’s amazing how you’ve woven together the themes of eagerness, love, and overcoming struggles. Your determination to shine and never give up is truly inspiring. Keep embracing that eagerness and let it guide you through every challenge.
I can really appreciate a literary piece such as this. What he gathered is, that in this poem… the imagery shed a light on the importance of seeing the world through different lenses, encouraging us to seek meaning through emotion. Kudos to such a great author.
This poem was very artistic, and the vivid imagery you used, and your own emotional depth resonated with me strongly evoking a sense of hope and determination in overcoming life’s challenges. It is so sweet to hear you are ready to prove yourself and lift yourself, despite it all.
BA this power is awesome. My favorite line is “never allowing life to consume the mind”. It reminds me of all the terrible things that could afflict us in life but how it is important we do not let that take over our minds. Therein lies all of our freedom. A poem that is capturing this and eagerness and love like how you do is truly something. Please continue to write.