Poem: “Strong”
Strong
Strong people make life go on
And some people live nice and some got the right price
Rich or poor, people always want more even if their heart is open and sore
But that’s life and it’s what people adore.
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Love this poem! Great rhyming.
I agree with the rhyming! I loved the poem as well, short and simple.
I thought the title of this poem was very fitting!
Your rhyme scheming was done exceptionally well.
In my personal experience, I’d have to agree. People are or at least seem to be hardwired to want more. But it makes you wonder if it’s truly hard wiring or the society we’ve been raised in that conditions is that way?
Great writing and thank you
Hi,
I really like the simplicity in this poem. I think it demonstrates an important life lesson. Everyone wishes for something in life no matter if it has a price or not. I like how you connected each line with a rhyme. Keep fighting!
All the best,
Sarah
Hey! I love your message in this poem and how you effectively allow the audience to see this through the short and simple wording! It is so true in this time of the world where it seems like everyone still yearns for for something more whether they have nothing or everything! Great poem!
Hello,
“It’s what people adore.” Wow. Your ability to point out one unifying desire in the human condition speaks volumes. I appreciate the method you used in this poem to demonstrate your thoughts – the rhyming, short phrases, simple wording. And yet the message was deep! Keep writing.
Best,
EOS
There is such a strong, wise message communicated in just a few lines. I agree with you, strong people keep us going! Nice poem!!
Best,
Samantha
The rhyming in the poem flows really well. I enjoyed reading this poem. I agree with the line “strong people make life go on.” This quote is very powerful and has a positive view of life. Keep up the good work and keep staying strong!
“People always want more” – so true! Even if everyone was rich, everyone would still want more. This world is run by strong people and conspiracists truly believe the richest people run the world! Especially in the U.S, we have created an economy where everyone is trying to get as much money as possible so children grow up feeling like they need to get rich which can cause false expectations.
Great writing and if it helps, keep going! I wish you the best and thanks for sharing!
~JP
I like how short and simple this poem was! The line that stood out to me was the line “Rich or poor, people always want more even if their heart is open and sore.” I think this is important to recognize because it shows how even if someone has everything, they still want more and more. On the flip side, some people do not have a lot so they want what others have because they cant have it themselves. I think this teaches a valuable lesson of being appreciative for the things you have because others might not. Great job!
I love your thought and ideas for this poem, I do believe you should get rid of the and in the second sentences and replace it with an “other” or try to change it around, the ands are just repetitive for that short of a sentence. Your rhyming goes along well throughout, I also like how you closed with a statement on what you view life is.
The title of your poem fits the writing perfectly. It was super simple and a great read. It flows well and I really enjoyed reading what you had to write.
I really liked the rhyme scheme you have throughout this poem! I think it was very clever to rhyme “sore” with “adore”. My favorite line is “Rich or poor, people always want more”. I liked this because it shows that no matter how much someone has, they will always want more.
I like the rhyme scheme a lot. There’s so many ideas here I think you could keep writing more about each of them and I hope you do
I love the flow of this poem. I feel like this poem has a lot to do with no matter what we have sometimes people can never be happy enough so they just continue to want more and ask for more. Really brings out the fact that some people no matter how much they own and what they have it could never make them truly happy enough.
I think titling the poem Strong speaks perfectly to the first line saying strong people make life go on. Being strong in jail might be the thing that keeps the time moving until you’re able to leave or it just gets you through the day. Being strong is something everyone should have with them.
I like this poem and how it rhymes. I love small poems especially if they have a strong message!!
I enjoyed the unique rhyme scheme and how simple the poem was as it was easier to understand its meaning. It’s very common to see people wanting more even if they have enough nowadays, and you portrayed its meaning in poetic form beautifully. Awesome job!
I thought your poem was great. Even though its on the shorter side, I still feel like it has a lot to say. To me it has a message of people are just people regardless of class, it deferent shapes and forms we all want the same things in life. I love the points you cover with few sentences. Great work!
I love the title and simplicity of this poem!
This poem beautifully captures the resilience of strong individuals who navigate life’s complexities, highlighting the contrast between material desires and emotional struggles. It reminds us that regardless of wealth or hardship, the pursuit of fulfillment is a universal experience.
how your poem draws me in and makes me reflect. It’s both beautiful and thought provoking
Your poem shows how strong people keep going and how everyone wants more, no matter what they have. Great job!