Poem: “True Feelings”
True Feelings
You make me happy
You make me smile
You make my blood
run like the river
called the Nile
And it’s so cold
you wrap me up
in towel just like
I was your child
You the reason I
think of black power
because you is
a strong black woman
who I desire
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A great poem,I loved It. I liked the way you used the words to describe the character and the way you used the Simile.
This is an incredible poem. Your wording provides a great visual to the reader. You are very talented!
Hi,
I hope all is well. Great use of simile and personification. I’m a black man and this poem feels like it fits for my mother. I look for a few qualities in my future wife that I do in my mother. Like strength, bravery, and compassion.
You brought this to life. Thank You
I really enjoyed this poem. I liked how you showed your love for this particular person and wrote how they are a strong black woman. Every line was filled with loved and admiration. I hope you continue to write in the future.
Thank you for taking the time to write this! I love the image of a strong black woman that you create. Please continue to celebrate those you love! I admire how you empower her and compare her to something as awe-inspiring as the Nile.
To the author of “True Feelings”,
This poem is so, so cute! I loved how you expressed your feelings for this Black woman in such a positive, wholesome way. The inclusion of “Black power” in this poem made me smile. This was a very cozy, sweet poem, and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you so much for sharing it with us!
Best,
Samantha
Hi,
My name is Maria Griffin, and I am a second-year student at Wayne State University in Detroit. This semester, I am taking a class whose goal is to engage with the community, beyond the university and corporations.
Your poem, True Feelings, is very powerful. Your choice of wording creates an impressive visual of the woman to the reader. The first five lines provide a description as to how you feel. Lines 6-9 provide the reader with a “warm” feeling that a mother would provide to their child. This build-up is the perfect pretense to your last few lines, describing the woman you desire and her strength and power. I interpreted this poem as talking about a mother because of the feelings you portrayed with your word choice. I also think this is a relevant poem at this moment because of March containing International National Women’s Day.
Overall, I think this was a finely written poem. I think you have a special talent, and you should continue to write more poems. Keep up the good work!
Dear author of “True Feelings”,
Thank you for sharing your realness with us. I love the poem. I appreciate the depth of the poem and the flow. Please keep writing poetry.
Agreed! This poem is really sweet and reflects on the importance of someone in your life. I really enjoyed reading this poem 🙂
Amazing poem, I felt like it really rhymed. I can tell how much feelings you have for this person and how important they are in your life.
This is an incredible poem. Your wording provides a great visual to the reader. You are very talented!
I could really feel the passion that you were putting into your writing and that you feel towards this person.
I loved your use of personification and similes to create an image in my head
This is a wonderful poem. I hope someday you find your strong black woman
This is a wonderful poem and the wording has such an importance and value towards them
Hi! Your use of simile is gorgeously rendered, and it paints such a tangible, visceral picture in my mind of blood rushing at full force when we’re with someone we love. The imagery is so warm and lovely, I was getting fuzzy feelings from reading about how much the subject of the poem means to you and all the positive effects she has on you. It also proves you have a strong handle on poetic form and structure, since you included some slant rhymes at the ends of the lines (smile/Nile/child/desire) which to me is very subtle and skillful. This poem is short and very sweet, and I loved getting the opportunity to read it. Thank you so much, and please continue to write more beautiful poems like this one!!
Whoever this may be written for is lucky. You have a gift. Some day strong black woman, you will see again.
Great poem! I like how you relate about love, race, and power. Your words are so sweet, I hope whoever this poem is about gets to read it. Thank you for sharing.
I love the way this poem was written, through simplicity and meaning. I love the way the use of imagery paints a picture in my head. Thank you for taking the time to share with us this poem.
I really enjoyed reading this. I love how you used a simile about the Nile River and how you compared it to your blood running through your blood. Similes add so much to a piece of writing, and it shows your passion to what you’re talking about.
Hello! Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem! You really expressed how much you love this person and your true feelings for them.
Thank you for sharing your vulnerable thoughts with us! This is such a beautiful poem because it depicts how women aura has the capacity to nurture men with small gestures. This strong black women gives you a sense of security and that’s something we all love for in love.
I loved reading this poem. I could really feel your passion and emotion while you wrote it. I completely agree with many of the other comments – keep celebrating your loved ones through art! Thank you for sharing yourself vulnerably. I wish you the absolute best.
I loveeee the literary techniques you used throughout this poem! The similes really helped me to truly understand your feelings.
This is a wonderful poem. It really highlights the bond with someone that holds you down. The flow of the poem along with the similes allows me to imagine everything. The importance that this person must have is greatly shown. I enjoyed this poem a lot.
Your poem beautifully expresses admiration and love, highlighting the strength and nurturing nature of the person you desire. The imagery and emotions are heartfelt and touching.
I can see how much effort and passion you put into this poem. It’s amazing to see such talent at such a young age!
This poem is so sweet and I can tell how much you care for the person in this poem. Through your strong words, I can clearly see that this person is so important in your life. I love the passion that you put into your writing and I hope you keep this up for future poems.