Surrounded/Rodeado

By LV

Surrounded by concrete walls.
Surrounded by an immense feeling of solitude.
Surrounded by concrete walls that don’t distance me from reality.
Surrounded by one-thousand-and-one dreams – that are kept away in prison cells.

Rodeado por paredes de concreto.
Rodeado por un inmenso sentimiento de soledad.
Rodeado por paredes de concreto que no me alejan de la realidad.
Rodeado de uno-y-mil sueños frustrados – que en celdas de prisión están aguardados.

Surrounded by concrete walls.
Surrounded by an immense feeling of solitude; that attacks my thoughts.
Surrounded by concrete walls, surrounded by a strange feeling that starts playing inside my head.
Surrounded by concrete walls, where you only hear the voice of solitude; that sings to my heart to the slow beat of a tormented heart.
We keep on walking through the valley of solitude.

Rodeado por paredes de concreto.
Rodeado de un inmenso sentimiento de soledad; que ataca a mis pensamientos.
Rodeado por paredes de concreto dentro de rodeado por extraño sentimiento que comienza a jugar dentro de mi cabeza. Rodeado de paredes de concreto donde lo único que se escucha es la voz de la soledad; que le canta a mi corazón al ritmo lento de un corazón atormentado. Seguimos caminando por el valle de la soledad.

Surrounded by concrete walls.
Surrounded by one-thousand-and-one problems.
Surrounded by an immense feeling of solitude, that flirts with my heart in the darkness of the night; and it invites to dance to the slow beat of a tormented heart. We keep on traveling the most traveled road.
“The road of forgotten.”

Rodeado por paredes de concreto.
Rodeado de uno y mil problemas.
Rodeado de un inmenso sentimiento de soledad, que le coquetea a mi corazón en la obscuridad de la noche, y lo invita a bailar al ritmo lento de un corazón atormentado.
Seguimos caminando, recorriendo la calle más transitada “la calle del olvido.”

Surrounded by an immense feeling of solitude.
Surrounded by concrete walls, where the voice of solitude is the only thing you hear.
Surrounded by one-thousand-and-one memories of the past.
Surrounded by one-thousand-and-one frustrated dreams — that are trapped in prison cells.
Surrounded by an immense feeling of solitude, that attacks my thoughts.
We keep walking through the valley of solitude.

Rodeado de un inmenso sentimiento de soledad.
Rodeado de paredes de concreto, donde la voz de la soledad es lo único que se escucha.
Rodeado de uno y mil recuerdos del pasado.
Rodeado de uno y mil sueños frustrados que en celdas de prisión están atrapados.
Rodeado de una inmensa soledad, que ataca mis pensamientos.
Seguimos caminando por el valle de la soledad.

Comments

  1. Yesica Benitez says

    LV,

    I often think that I am surrounded by walls as well. Although my walls are not physically present and I am free to go wherever I please to go, I still feel trapped in a sense. I do have a feeling of solitude, a feeling that no matter how surrounded I am with people, I will always be alone in this world. I feel like even though there are a million people out there constantly making contact with me, that I will never really want to let them into my life because I have a wall in front of me. I feel like I build my own walls. It would be nice to let the walls down for a while, but I am too stubborn to let others in. I build many walls around me, and I do feel alone. Although I can’t imagine what it’s like to have concrete walls around me 24/7 I do feel connected to you in such a way that I know what it’s like to feel trapped. I loved your poem and I felt such a connection to your words.

  2. LV-
    Thank you for sharing this beautifully lyrical poem! The degree of surrounding solitude you’re feeling is intense and I can feel a small portion of it through the imagery in your words. I want to also surround you with support from the Free Minds community, I know it may be hard to feel because of the distance, but we are here! Please continue to create and share your beautiful work!

  3. Jocelyn Matos says

    I see you took allot of time in this. You are bi lingual! Great skill to have in this world. I hope your days get better day by day. Solitude can be used in many positive ways.

  4. This poem shows the person longing for time outside. It captures the mind that is wandering about the past memories and how they remember their memories and dreams from their past. It seems that this person is trapped inside their own mind and physically. Great poem. This really speaks to the injustices that are happening right now with immigrants being locked up in cells and quarantined. Gracias.

  5. I really enjoyed reading your poem. I think utilizing the repetition of “Surrounded by concrete walls” is a really great way to start each stanza. Your themes are apparent and strong. I hope you continue to write with so much power.

  6. Michaela says

    I thought that your poem was very moving and I appreciated that you wrote in Spanish and English. I am so empowered by your work and your ability to harness your feelings into such a beautiful piece of poetry. Your words are touching and I hope that my comment can help you a bit with your feelings of solitude, you have me cheering for you and I’m sure so many people that are proud of your work on this piece.

  7. This is such a powerful piece. The feeling of solitude is one that I think a lot can relate to…especially now with so many people under quarantine with COVID. You do an incredible job portraying what you are going through and relating to the readers

  8. Jenny Ulehla says

    This is very moving LV. Keep reading and writing. It will help light the way. JU

  9. Hi LV,
    I loved the repetition of “Surrounded” as it drew me in emotionally and is a great element of poetry. In your solitude, I hope you know I am thinking of you. I hope you continue to use poetry as an outlet. Stay strong and I hope to see more poems from you!

  10. Kayelynn says

    LV,

    Very heart wrenching piece. You give the readers an intimate view into your thoughts and emotions, it’s eye-opening to learn more about what incarcerated people feel and experience. I enjoyed how you also translated each stanza into Spanish, which can expand your readership past those of us that only speak English. Great writing and I believe that you’ll overcome the difficulties you’re facing!

  11. Patricia says

    I thought this poem was absolutely beautiful. I especially loved how after every verse you repeated the verse in Spanish. I think that shows how intelligent and capable you are. Thank you for allowing me to read this, I was touched by your honesty and vulnerability.

  12. Bonnie Dorsey says

    LV:
    Your poem “Surrounded,” with its repetition of sounds and words and ideas, successfully portrays the mental pain and loneliness of incarceration. I was especially intrigued by the way you constructed the poem, layering an English verse above a Spanish one, then back to English. Not only does it add dimension to the total poem, but it is helpful for someone with just a little Spanish and gives the opportunity to learn more of the language by seeing how each English line is translated into Spanish.
    Finally, many of your images—e.g., “solitude that flirts with my heart,” and “traveling the most traveled road,” give the poem a meaningful personal signature, one hard to imitate.

  13. Hello, LV–I really like how this poem is in two languages, making it accessible to even more people.
    These lines are such a powerful twist on Frost’s lines about the road less traveled:
    We keep on traveling the most traveled road.
    “The road of forgotten.”

  14. Carlos Guzman says

    To LV,
    After reading your poem I cannot help but to have an immense feeling sadness for the way you are feeling inside those concrete walls, as you stated in your well-versed poem. Your writing skills impress me because you are able to evoke feeling into it and it is something a lot of people cannot do. I envisioned myself in your place and I cannot help but to feel bad for the way you are feeling inside! Living in incarceration must be such a horror and nightmare, I cannot imagine what you are going through.

    I really liked how your poem is in both Spanish and English because it is really great to see you are fluent in both languages. One theme I found hard to miss in your poem is of solitude, feeling alone and in the darkness. It is a very powerful feeling and one which many people cannot experience. When you mentioned “We keep walking through the valley of solitude” is a great example of being able to paint a picture figuratively for the reader because I actually visioned myself walking through a deep gorge, a place where I would my wildest nightmares and monsters live.

    However, as I walked through this gorge I saw light at the end of it, almost as if this valley of solitude is a test and those who remained focus to succeed will see the light at the end of the tunnel once again. Just know, hope is always around the corner and you must remain positive in a better tomorrow, as humans hope is all we have sometimes. I don’t know if your religious, but my mother always taught me when I feel beaten or alone, to pray to God because he is always right by our sides. Don’t give up on yourself and remain faithful things will always get better at the end of the day. I truly believe in second chances, and I am confident you will be happy once again.

    I also like your verse “…that flirts with my heart in the darkness of the night; and invites to dance to the slow beat of a tormented heart.” I mean… this is so powerful and thought provoking. You can definitely feel how beaten in silence you may be feeling. Great use of metaphoric language to describe, not matter what you do being in jail brings loneliness and it is unescapable. It is like you have a new relationship with loneliness. Very great writing! seriously, congratulations. My heart felt to the floor when I read this.

    I am writing this letter to you because I am a graduating senior at San Jose State University and of my course requires for us to reach out to those in our communities, to engage and motivate! I know you are limited given your circumstances, but if there is anything I wish you take away from this letter is to remain hopeful and to continue to write poems! Your experiences and stories can be used to help others in need. You have a very powerful skill to evoke feeling through writing, it is truly very special. I hope nothing but the best and I am sending you positive vibes, I hope you see happiness soon!

    -Carlos

  15. Ray Ryan says

    I really like your use of repetition and I sympathize with your situation and hope the best for you!! Sometimes the road of the forgotten can just be the road less traveled but I wish you the best and like your poetry! It’s quite heartfelt.

  16. LV,

    I hope that you’re healthy and well during these turbulent times. Your poem was touching and I am so sorry that you are feeling a solitude that no human being, especially no human being your age, should feel. Your writing is beautiful and I hope you find some solace in your strength of mind and in your writing.
    There are people who care about fixing the cruelty of our penal system and who are fighting for your rights. I hope that one day you are able to walk out, and no longer be imprisoned by four walls, but instead be filled with love from people that care about you. Thank you for letting us see your work and sharing a piece of you with us.

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