Self Destruct

This message will self destruct in 5,4,3,2,1,
That all I been down all my life
destroying my self
making bad decisions all my life
want some weed?
yea sure
wanna start a fight?
yea sure
just the count down to my destruction

4 Comments

  1. Rob Poliquin on October 22, 2011 at 4:12 PM

    I love your opening line.It is an instant attention getter. The hopelessness and inevitable downfall you depict are truly soul-crushing, and I can only hope that you heed your own prophetic words. There are always choices, as you yourself say in line 4: “making bad decisions all my life.” I can only hope that with a talent and insight like yours you will avoid “the countdown to [your] destruction.” Don’t deprive the world of you talent.

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  2. Naomi L on October 23, 2011 at 3:59 PM

    I really liked this poem. Both the first line and last line went perfectly with each and carried what you were saying across really well. I liked the length of the poem and felt each line had a lot to say.
    The only thing I wasn’t quite sure about was the line ‘That all I been down all my life’. I didn’t entirely understand it.
    This poem really made me feel a lot of things. Sadness mostly.
    It was a beautiful poem, thank you for putting up here. I loved reading it.

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  3. noraaa on October 27, 2011 at 11:34 AM

    i like the composition! minimalist!

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  4. Frances on November 1, 2011 at 4:12 PM

    What happens if you count up instead of down?

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