Poem: “Mystery Lover”
Mystery Lover
This girl dun blind my view like a shiny watch,
She has my head thinkin’ emotional like the speech at the Million Man March.
Sometimes I just reminisce and smile,
Because of how much I miss her.
Her ways, her style, her whole demeanor,
I never knew I would find such a strong, independent black sistah
that I could talk to like she is my biological sistah.
She knows who’s real and who’s a wangsta
So don’t try to bring your weak game if you a pranksta.
Most dudes can’t even handle her
They say she too aggressive or mean,
I say that’s my mystery lover
You just don’t know how to persuade her.
12 Comments
Leave a Comment
The poets featured here are currently incarcerated, and many of them are in federal prisons far from home. Your feedback is a valuable source of motivation and connection to the outside community. Post your comments, feedback, and encouragement in the space below the poem. Messages will be passed on directly to the author. Comments may not appear immediately on the site, as our team processes them to mail to the poets.
Poem: “Mystery Lover”
I like how you describe this strong woman, your mystery lover. And while other men feel intimidated by her, you’re not “afraid” to approach her because you and her have already a connection.
Most dudes can’t even handle her
They say she too aggressive or mean,
I say that’s my mystery lover
You just don’t know how to persuade her.
I love the joy in this poem. Your passion is inspiring! Loving someone can get us through the hardest times. Keep your passion kindred and keep writing!
KC
Hi there,
I was immediately drawn to this poem from its captivating title. I’m quite the sucker for a romantic poem. 🙂
I love the simile in the very first sentence when you compare your crush blinding your view like the way a shiny watch would do if you were to look at the watch face in the direct sunlight. It’s got great imagery and it’s incredibly adorable.
I also love the allusion in the second line where you reference the speech at the Million Man March. I actually had no idea what this was, so your poem prompted me to look it up and learn more about it (thank you!) 🙂
I can tell by the way you speak about this person that you really like them – it comes through really clearly in the ways that you describe her personality.
This is a really beautiful piece. If she knows you like her, I hope she knows how lucky she is.
Best,
A
Hi there,
I was immediately drawn to this poem from its captivating title. I’m quite the sucker for a romantic poem 🙂
I love the simile in the very first sentence when you compare your crush blinding your view like the way a shiny watch would do if you were to look at the face in direct sunlight. It’s got great imagery and it’s incredibly adorable.
I also love the allusion in the second line where you reference the speech at the Million Man March. I actually had no idea what this was, so this poem prompted me to look it up and learn more about it (thank you!) 🙂
I can tell by the way you speak about this person that you really like them – it comes through really clearly in the ways that you describe her personality.
This is a really beautiful piece. If she knows you like her, I really hope she knows how lucky she is.
Best,
A
Dear author of “Mystery Lover”
There is a bright tone to this poem. This poem has a very nice flow. I appreciate the depth of the poem and the flow. Thank you sharing with us and please continue to write poetry.
I love the confidence of this poem! You don’t care what anyone has to say about the woman you love, because you know she’s for you! You appreciate things in your lover that others don’t. Nice work!
Best,
Samantha
I love the rhymes and the way you get your point across so creatively. Well done!
This poem made me feel happy and I could feel your joy and passion while reading. You clearly have developed a very distinct voice of your own, and I hope you keep writing! I wish you the absolute best.
This is such a beautiful poem. I loved the way you described her, I’m a sucker for romance.
Your poetry does a wonderful job of capturing the intensity of your love for this girl who has won your heart. She dazzles your senses like a shiny watch and makes you feel something when you think about it, kind of like the speeches during the Million Man March. You can’t help but smile as you think back on her and miss everything about her, including her manners, sense of style, and self-assured personality. It’s obvious that you have a particular space in your heart for her—almost like a sister—who you can trust and confide in. You respect her strength and genuineness because you know she can tell the true from the phony. Although she may seem threatening to others, you view her as your enigmatic lover, someone you should pursue patiently and understandingly.
Your words paint a vivid picture of how much she means to you. You capture her strength and uniqueness perfectly. It’s clear she has a special place in your heart.
There’s a raw relying honesty in your words that’s refreshing to read and it’s mind settling. Your poem is full of heart and depth. Keep up the great work