It’s Within… Music
By DC
Music is like a virus that stimulates the mind and heart.
It’s like a tumor that grows, and grows, that has no cure.
Once you’re caught in its rapture, there’s no escaping it.
There’s no fighting it, only submitting to it.
Embracing its amazing feeling, that makes you smile when there’s nothing to smile about, that makes you cry from the joy you feel…
Music is like a disease that runs through the veins of the chosen ones
That spreads through the body like a forest fire.
I dare you to look into the eyes of music,
Listen to its sounds of pleasure and pain.
Music… Music is, and always will be within you.
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I love the figurative and descriptive language that you use to describe music. This adds to the reader’s experience, and helps them connect to the emotion that you are so eloquently conveying.
Hi DC – love the imagery in your poem! You’ve really captured so well how music gets inside of you and takes over your emotions! When I hear certain songs, they can immediately change my entire mood, either making me feel joyful, or wistful, or sad. Music can transport me back to certain time, places, and people in my life. Music is SO powerful, just like your poem says!! Keep on writing — poetry is music too!
I enjoyed your poem! You did an amazing job! Music is my passion and favorite way to escape reality. I love the references you used to compare and describe music. You described exactly what I feel when I listen to music. The unique comparisons between music being a virus is brilliant! You have great writing technique!
DC, I love your poem! I love the vivid imagery you included to compare music to health ailments that take over or may hurt a person. I think this is a really interesting juxtaposition as it contrasts the raw feeling of music as a means to heal as well as something so powerful that it can make a person almost obsessed! Keep writing!
Dear DC: Thank you for sharing the powerful words and emotions of this poem. You’ve beautifully put into words the intense feelings music can bring us; how it gets under our skin and will always be within us. Once we feel the music, it’s always there to draw on as you say in pleasure or pain. You make great use of language to bring your poem to life: Music is like a disease . . . spreads through the body like a forest fire . . . look into the eyes of music. I could imagine listening to music and feeling these things happening!
You’re a thoughtful writer capable of evoking vivid images. you have a gift to share; I hope you will keep writing!
This poem really captures how powerful and unavoidable music can be. The imagery is intense, but it fits the idea of music taking over your emotions and staying with you no matter what. I especially like how you show both the joy and pain music brings, and the ending line ties everything together in a simple, strong way.
You are so right, DC-music is such an important part of our lives. It takes you back to a certain moment, or makes you feel happy, or sad, or makes you want to dance. I love that you chose “music” to write about!
This poem uses some poetic elements to encourage the reader want to keep reading. I appreciate the flow and the energy of it as well as how relevant the topic is because music is something so much bigger than us. The speaker in the poem shows how intertwined music is within everything, its own life force. Keep at your poetry.
Great keep up the good work
There’s something really striking about this poem, and I love how boldly it leans into the idea that music isn’t just entertainment, it’s something that takes over in the best possible way. The comparisons to a virus, a tumor, a disease, they’re intense, but they capture how powerful music can feel when it gets inside you. It spreads, it grows, and it changes you, sometimes without you even noticing until you’re already caught up in it.
This poem really stuck with me. I like how you compare music to something uncontrollable, almost dangerous, but in a beautiful way. For me that shows how powerful music can be in our lives. The mix of pleasure and pain feels very real, and the ending makes it feel personal, like music is part of who we are whether we want it or not. It honestly made me think about how music shows up for me during the hardest moments and how it has become a comfort for me.
The intense metaphors make music feel overwhelming in the best way, capturing how it can completely take over your emotions and stay with you even when everything else fades.
DC, I really enjoyed this poem. Personally, I find the extended metaphor of music as a virus, tumor, and disease to be striking and memorable, especially because it contrasts with how music is usually described as healing or beautiful. The imagery within the poem is very descriptive and consistent, particularly the themes of music moving throughout parts of the body like veins, brain and heart. However, I feel like these metaphors are almost too similar to each other, and variety of these metaphors could make your poem much stronger and more unique. Overall, the poem succeeds in expressing how consuming and transformative music can be. With some refinement in imagery and line structure, it could become even more powerful and polished.
“Music… Music is, and always will be, within you.” I think this is a beautiful line, and it’s something I have come to realize recently. I have a little cousin who is almost 2 years old, and she has always loved music. She has always naturally danced along to the songs she likes and doesn’t dance for the ones she doesn’t like. She loves to wear my headphones and listen to the music I’m listening to. She can’t understand any of the words, but she can feel the music. She doesn’t need to understand anything because it’s something that she has always had in her; we all do. We are born with the ability to feel things very deeply, and music is something that makes us feel deeply, even when you are 2 years old and cant even understand what the lyrics mean, and even when you don’t have the words to explain what exactly the music makes you feel; we still feel it, and it naturally moves through us.
Hi DC, Your poem is so deep it reflects your emotions about life and pain. The poem is very beautiful and meaningful. Hope you are still writing. Keep writing!
Music is awesome. I’ll be honest I completely relate to how you put it here. Music has made me feel sad when there has been nothing happening in my life to be sad about, it’s made me dance when I wanna cry, it’s made me mad. It really can completely change how you feel in the moment you listen. Once the song ends sometimes it leaves you feeling completely different. I love it soooooo much. I wish I was as talented as half the people who make music. Back to what I was saying though, with how you put music I completely agree. Sometimes discovering new music can feel like getting swept up into a never ending ocean of feelings and sounds from the artist where you just have to submit and you put it very very well!
I love the juxtaposition between the lines “There’s no fighting it, only submitting to it” and “Embracing its amazing feeling”. The mood shits from internal struggle to carefree embrace and it almost feels like the reader is physically breaking free from the grip of the musical tumor.
Hello, I loved how you used music in this poem. Music can be whatever you want it to be. It can be good or bad, helpful or not helpful, It can get you through the toughest times or make your happiest moments even happier. Some tunes do latch on to you like a virus but others do drift away.
I loved this poem, I can you have a deep and profound appreciation for music and what it does to the mind. I also love music, I am never not listening to music, feeling the beats and listening to the lyrics as well as the story the artists are telling. You poem moved me and really spoke to me!
This poem is so meta. It reads like music itself.
I love this poem, and resonate with it deeply. It shares the amazing feeling of listening to music and feeling it connecting people together. I love the words “I dare you to look into the eyes of music,” because it shares how strong and powerful music can be. Great job!
Your poem has strong emotional intensity and vivid passion, and it clearly shows how deeply you feel about music. The extended metaphor of music as a virus, tumor, and disease creates a powerful sense of inevitability and obsession, which effectively communicates how consuming and transformative music can be. Lines like “that makes you smile when there’s nothing to smile about” and “look into the eyes of music” add emotional depth and personification, giving the poem a dramatic, almost spoken-word quality. However, comparing music to illness (virus, tumor, disease) may unintentionally create negative associations that could weaken the beauty of your message, so you might consider balancing those darker metaphors with more uplifting or nuanced imagery. Overall, this is a passionate and expressive piece with strong imagery and conviction, and with a bit more refinement and metaphor balance, it could become even more striking and memorable.
This is a powerful and striking poem. The extended metaphor comparing music to a virus and a disease is bold and memorable. Instead of describing music in soft or predictable ways, the poem gives it intensity and force, showing how deeply it can take hold of someone. The repetition of growth and inevitability creates a feeling that music is unstoppable, almost consuming, which makes the imagery feel vivid and dramatic.