Freedom
By JS
Freedom is the most beautiful thing
I took for granted,
She was once in my life but then she vanished.
I ended in a cell cold and lonely,
I felt stranded,
feeling like what happened?
Yearning for her return – Please come back.
like a wheel without air – I felt flat.
Seconds and minutes without her touch,
days and weeks and still no luck.
Month after month – they turn to years.
I called your name but you ain’t hear,
how you pop up on me so close and near
I swear it’s scary and I’m hard to fear.
Your light so bright – like a chandelier.
No longer dark – I see your sparks.
Take you for granted – never again,
they want you again –
they gone need more than chains.
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The opening line is so powerful and draws so much attention! Very well done.
This poem is so powerful and heartfelt — you can really feel the depth of emotion in every line. The imagery is vivid, especially when describing the absence of freedom as feeling flat like a wheel without air and the light of freedom shining like a chandelier. The rhythm and flow make the longing and hope so real. It’s a beautiful reflection on appreciating freedom and never taking it for granted. Amazing work!
This is a very thoughtful piece and it’s stuck with me all evening. There’s a musicality to your writing. I’d like to give special attention to the line “I called your name but you ain’t hear.” The wordplay here adds another layer to it. “You ain’t hear,” if you say it out loud, could also sound like “you ain’t here” which also is true. Thanks for sharing, keep writing!
Your poem’s symbolism powerfully portrays lost freedom, regret, and its triumphant return despite oppression’s chains.
This poem really captures the deep longing for freedom and the realization of its value. The imagery of feeling stranded and flat without freedom is powerful. I love how you describe freedom’s return as a bright light, like a chandelier, bringing hope and joy. It’s a strong reminder to never take such a precious thing for granted again!
I love the end. The shift in tone, where freedom reappears “like a chandelier” and no longer feels dark, is inspiring and hopeful.
This poem beautifully captures the pain of loss and the longing for freedom, highlighting the raw emotions of regret and yearning, allowing readers to feel the weight of the speaker’s journey; “I called your name but you ain’t hear.” Personifying freedom as a beloved entity makes the poem feel very personal and resonates with readers. I also admire the transition in tone that mirrors your journey from despair to hope. This piece is a phenomenal expression of the value of freedom and the lessons learned in the absence of it. Very inspiring, great work!
This is writing is so exciting to read for both the meaning your poem holds and the cleverness in your writing and rhyming, it sounds almost like a song, making it so easy and pleasing to read. Not only this, but it is so deep and really perfectly illustrates the feeling of being separated from a loved one. I am so happy you shared this, keep sharing many more!
This poem beautifully captures the profound loss and longing for freedom. The shift from despair to empowerment at the end brings a hopeful message – great poem!
This poem is really great! It really shows how how much freedom means and how hard it is to lose it.The way you talk about light and darkness makes it so powerful. I can feel the emotion, amazing job!
I think you’re in the same boat as a lot of people, not just those around you but those who still have “her” in their life. I hope one day if you aren’t already you get out very soon and get to enjoy freedom again , shes wonderful. If you are not out, you should keep writing poems about it and how you would like to spend your freedom once you have it again.
You really capture the pull of grief in all directions–from feeling “cold and lonely” to seeing her “sparks.” And the reader is completely with you when you say you’re longing for her but when she does appear (what I take to mean not a literal visit but the sense of her presence), you feel what seems like fear or is possibly amazement at the closeness after all this time. All the contradictions make perfect sense and form a complete picture. Really nice job.
This is a very deep, emotional poem. The way you personify freedom makes it feel almost like a lost love, something you once had but now just out of reach. The rhythm and flow is exceptional, and the use of rhyming connects the lines together beautifully. The last line is especially powerful. Great work!
This poem powerfully captures the deep longing and appreciation for freedom, weaving vivid imagery and raw emotion to convey a journey from despair to enlightenment. Its heartfelt reflection serves as a poignant reminder to cherish what we often take for granted.
This is a lovely poem. I specifically love the first line “Freedom is the most beautiful thing.” I enjoy how you appreciate the freedom throughout the poem and how wonderful it is. Great poem!
I feel this poem so profoundly. Never taking life for granted is something everyone needs to learn and I do as well for myself.
You truly grabbed my attention with your opening line. Freedom is very special and is often something that many of us take for granted. You will have freedom again someday.
This poem really pulls at the heart. The way it describes the loss of freedom and the longing for it to return is so relatable. I love how it starts off feeling lost and empty, then ends with such a strong message of hope and strength. The last line especially hits hard. Beautifully written and full of emotion!
This is a great piece, with so much emotion that I can vividly imagine. The line “Yearning for her return – Please come back. like a wheel without air – I felt flat.” is so impactful in the context of your poem. Personifying freedom was a great touch that really humanizes it. You are so talented and I genuinely enjoyed reading this poem. Please keep writing!
This poem powerfully expresses the longing for freedom and the pain of losing it, only to realize its true value after it’s gone. It beautifully conveys the shift from feeling trapped to finding strength and appreciation for freedom’s return.
This poem captures the deep emotional weight of lost freedom and the profound longing for its return, using vivid metaphors like “a wheel without air” and “your light so bright – like a chandelier.” The raw, confessional tone makes the speaker’s journey from regret to awakening feel deeply personal and relatable. Strengthening the rhythm and flow in a few lines could make the poem even more powerful, but its message is already striking and heartfelt.
Your words are raw and powerful, capturing both the ache of loss and the hope of redemption. Keep speaking your truth—because your love for freedom, and your growth through the struggle, are stronger than any chain.
I love the personification of freedom and rhyme scheme in the poem, it’s a great way of showing the sheer power of having freedom
This poem is a powerful ode to freedom—raw, emotional, and full of growth. The metaphor of freedom as a lost love gives it depth, while the imagery of chains, darkness, and light captures the emotional toll of confinement. The final lines hit hard, showing a transformation from regret to resilience. Beautifully done.
This poem powerfully captures the aching loss and newfound reverence for freedom, turning regret into a vow of transformation and resilience that no chains can hold.
Wow. The honesty in your words are truly striking. You’ve painted a vivid picture of what it feels like to lose freedom and the longing that follow. Your use of metaphor is beautiful , especially lines like “like a wheel without air – I felt flat” and “Your light so bright – like a chandelier.” There’s a natural rhythm and flow to your writing that keeps the reader engaged from start to finish. The ending hits hard. That final couplet carries so much strength and truth: “Take you for granted – never again, / they want you again – / they gone need more than chains.” That line right there shows growth, resilience, and a deep sense of self-awareness.
Hey JS! This poem captures the deep pain of losing freedom and the powerful longing to get it back. I felt your emotions clearly, especially how time passes so slowly without it. The comparison to light and a chandelier was really strong and beautiful. Your message is clear—freedom is priceless, and once it’s gone, it changes everything. I think you did a great job with this poem and I can’t wait to hopefully read more of your work in the future!
This poem hits deep—it’s raw and emotional, but also powerful. The way it personifies freedom as something beautiful and almost romantic makes the loss feel even heavier. I really like the shift from despair to hope toward the end, like that moment when freedom starts to return is both shocking and sacred.
This poem beautifully captures the deep ache of losing something we don’t realize we need until it’s gone. Freedom is personified in such a vivid, emotional way—it feels like a lost love, a missing part of the soul. Lines like “like a wheel without air – I felt flat” and “your light so bright – like a chandelier” really stuck with me. The ending is especially powerful—it’s not just a personal vow, it’s a larger statement about resilience and reclaiming what’s rightfully ours. Raw, emotional, and incredibly well written.
The imagery you used is so vivid– it painted a whole picture in my mind. You have a gift for making emotions come alive on the page. Thank you for sharing!
The structure and pacing gave it a smooth, spoken-word quality. It feels like it would be powerful when performed aloud.
This poem is a raw and heartfelt tribute to the value of freedom, capturing the pain of its absence and the awe of its return. Your imagery powerfully contrasts darkness with light, showing how even in isolation, hope can still flicker and grow. It’s a passionate vow never to take freedom lightly again—a message that echoes with truth, strength, and redemption.
Dear JS – I like the way your poem describes your discovery of the beauty of Freedom. Perhaps for you, as it is for me – when I write about a topic, I understand it better. Perhaps even more writing about FREEDOM will help you to find a way to have your mind feel free even though your body is imprisoned.
Your imagery of freedom as a “chandelier” breaking through darkness is stunning. This poem captures both the pain of loss and the joy of hope so vividly.
This poem is so eye-opening and touching to read. It has such a powerful touch to it and really shows your personal experiences with freedom and how you yearn for it. You really take the reader into your writing and make us feel the pain and feeling of yearning for freedom. You really tell a story with your poem, starting from how you first had freedom to now how it shows up in sparks, which really strikes the reader and adds to the depth of this poem! Overall, you did an amazing job with this poem! I had such a great time reading it!!
Hi JS,
This is such a moving poem, I really liked the way that you personified freedom in the beginning. It is a creative yet profound way to express the meaning of the work.
Great poem 🙂
Dear JS,
Your poem “Freedom” is a raw and powerful testament to the beauty and fragility of liberty. It’s a strong and touching tribute to how precious freedom is. You describe it as something beautiful that slipped away, leaving you feeling “cold and lonely” in a cell, which really pulls at the heart. Lines like “like a wheel without air / I felt flat” and the slow passing of “month after month” turning into years show how heavy that loss felt. But then, when you talk about freedom coming back, shining “like a chandelier,” it’s so hopeful and exciting. Your promise to never take it for granted again, and the bold line “they gone need more than chains,” feels like a powerful stand for your spirit. Thank you for sharing such a moving poem that reminds us to treasure our freedom.
This poem powerfully captures the pain of losing freedom, the longing for its return, and the vow to cherish it forever once regained.
This poem feels like a personal letter to freedom. It shows how much more precious freedom becomes once it’s lost. The author is really able to capture the pain of confinement. The author’s promise to never take freedom for granted again is also very powerful.
This poem talks about losing freedom and realizing how important it truly is. It shares the pain of being trapped, the deep desire to feel free again, and the relief when freedom returns. It reminds us never to take freedom for granted because it’s stronger than any chains.
This poem captures both the pain of losing freedom and the awe of its return, with vivid imagery that makes the emotions shine through. I liked how you turned freedom into a living presence, almost like a person whose light can’t be dimmed. Powerful work.
This is powerful—raw and honest. I like how you personify freedom as something lost and rediscovered, turning pain into resilience. The ending hits hard with its defiance and strength.
This poem paints a moving picture of longing for freedom and learning not to take it for granted. The vivid imagery and emotional lines remind us just how precious freedom truly is, offering hope for brighter days ahead and inspiring gratitude for moments of liberation.
This poem empathizes not taking anything for granted. We see the narrator distraught over losing his loved one and taking her for granted. But when she came back she was like a “chandelier”. We should not take the people in our lives for granted. We never know how much we will miss them until they are gone.
Very emotional piece of writing. This is very well written and gets into deep emotion. very powerful lines used such as “she was once in my life but then she vanished. I ended in a cell cold and lonely, I felt stranded.” this really speaks to how the writer was expressing their emotions. very powerful piece of writing!
This poem is raw, emotional, and redemptive. It captures the deep ache of losing freedom and the spiritual rebirth that comes with regaining it. The rhythm feels like a heartbeat—steady but heavy with reflection and resilience. The imagery of darkness, light, and chains creates a vivid journey from confinement to clarity, ending with a powerful vow never to take freedom for granted again.
You describe the loss and return of freedom in a way that feels very real and heartfelt. The way you personify freedom as “she” gives the poem a deep emotional connection. It’s like you’re talking about someone you love and miss, which makes the message even stronger. Your use of rhyme gives the poem a natural rhythm. Overall, this poem is moving, honest, and full of emotion. You turn your personal experience into something many people can relate to losing something precious and realizing its true value. Keep writing, your voice has both power and purpose.
This poem has a really strong emotional pull. You made “freedom” feel like a real person, someone you loved, lost, and finally saw again. The way you describe that emptiness without her hits deep, especially with lines like “like a wheel without air – I felt flat.” It’s honest and powerful, showing regret, hope, and transformation all at once. The ending flips it perfectly. Now that you’ve felt her loss, you’ll never take her for granted again. It’s raw, reflective, and full of heart.
This is a very powerful piece. Freedom is something that not many people feel. It captures the feeling of freedom being present and then being taken. It shows how freedom is a desire to all but can vanish in a split second. Thank you for sharing this.
This one really shows growth through experience. The imagery of freedom disappearing and returning gives it a powerful sense of reflection and change.
Freedom is a heartfelt, grounded, and powerful poem that reads like a redemption song — both personal and universal. Its conversational rhythm, vivid metaphors, and emotional arc make it compelling. With some light polishing for flow and tone consistency, it could be even more striking — a perfect piece for spoken word or performance.
Very thoughtful poem, JS! This poem alone brings about great reflection questions about the concept of freedom. The raw emotion behind the words speaks to me.
Hey JS! This poem shows how deeply you feel the loss of freedom and the struggle that comes with it. You show powerful emotion in the way freedom returns like a sudden light after years of darkness. You show hope and strength in your promise to never take freedom for granted again. I really loved reading this, great job!
JS,
Your poem shows the pain of losing freedom and the shock of finally getting it back. The shift from darkness to light feels powerful, and the ending makes it clear you’ll never take that freedom for granted again.
This poem beautifully captures the longing and appreciation for freedom after experiencing its loss. I love how the imagery makes freedom feel alive and precious, turning the struggle into a vivid, emotional journey.
This a very beautiful and thoughtful poem. When reading i could tell the how this situation truly made you feel and was full of emotions. You used some very good imagery to really get your feelings across and it worked very well. Throughout the whole poem the rhythm was wonderful and so easy to draw you in. Overall a very beautiful and powerful poem about freedom.
This poem captures the ache of losing freedom and the overwhelming relief of feeling its light return. The vivid imagery and emotional honesty make the final message hit hard: freedom is priceless, and once regained, it won’t be surrendered again.
This poem feels raw and emotional, like a conversation with freedom itself. The way it moves from loss to hope is powerful—the loneliness, the waiting, and then that sudden brightness when freedom finally returns. It captures the preciousness of freedom, especially after it has been taken away.
JS, Your poem paints such a vivid picture of what it feels like to lose freedom and then finally feel it return. The way you personify freedom makes the emotions hit even harder: loneliness, longing, regret, and then that sudden brightness when hope comes back. Your lines move from darkness to light in a powerful way, reminding us not to take freedom for granted and showing how deeply it’s valued once it’s gone. Thank you for sharing something so real and heartfelt.
This poem is incredibly moving and the emotion behind each line truly comes through. Your imagery is especially striking, from the feeling of freedom being deflated like a tire with no air to the brightness of freedom shining like a chandelier. The rhythm and flow make the longing and hope feel genuine and vivid. It’s a thoughtful reminder of the value of freedom and how important it is not to overlook it. Beautifully done!
I absolutely loved the beginning! It drew so much attention. I can’t imagine how hard it must be to know that freedom is right in front of you and you cannot reach it. I hope writing has made it slightly easier. I’m praying for you!
This is a great use of personification and descriptive language!
I see your hope in this poem. It shares a deep hunger for freedom, something that seems out of reach. I love how you personalized the idea of freedom, using “she and her” pronouns instead of just “it”. Great job!
This poem vividly captures the deep longing and appreciation for freedom, portraying it as both a personified presence and a vital force. The use of striking metaphors and emotional contrasts makes the journey from loss to rediscovery feel intensely personal and powerful.
This poem personifies freedom in such a powerful and emotional way. Referring to freedom as “she” makes the loss feel deeply personal, almost like losing someone you love. The lines describing being “in a cell cold and lonely” and feeling “like a wheel without air” really capture the emptiness and stagnation that comes with that loss. I also appreciated how time is emphasized—“months turn to years”—which shows how heavy and lasting that absence can be. The shift toward the end, where freedom returns “like a chandelier,” brings a sense of hope and clarity, and the promise to never take it for granted again feels meaningful and earned. This poem made me reflect on how easily freedom can be overlooked until it’s gone, and how powerful it is when regained. Thank you for sharing such a vivid and heartfelt piece.
Hello, your personification of freedom is very impactful and adds so much to this idea of wanting and longing. I like using personification in my writing too, it isn’t always people we miss, sometimes it is ideas and concepts and times in our life.
This is an excellent poem! The personification of freedom throughout the text really draws the reader in and allows you to feel the restriction, conveyed in the poem, more deeply. The simile “like a wheel without air” also helps the reader feel the sincere emotion. Overall, a very good poem. Keep writing!
Hello JS, what a beautiful poem you wrote! The rhyming, rhythm, and word choice is so well put together. I love it! The yearning for something you once had is so powerful. Giving this freedom a persona is so interesting. It also makes me wonder if the feeling of freedom is a person. Such a powerful poem thank you for sharing!