Protecting My Energy…

By GL

I’ve made peace out of chaos,
by taking a piece out of chaos…
for chaos is but an imbalance to the natural disorder
of the universe.
So, I trained my mind to freeze the earth
So I can take the MC out of square…
Once you take Mass and Matter out of the equation
You’ve created a space, where negative energy dissipate
Where it used to be “Air”…
Riddle ME.
I am, who I tend to be
My vision is what many pretend to see
I have the ability to create my own destiny
The sign and symbols resting next to me.
…and believe it or not.
Adversity is the main verb, that’s protecting me.

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26 Comments

  1. Jordyn Salmon on February 16, 2020 at 4:08 PM

    GL,
    The abstract way you discuss making peace and creating your own destiny through science and mathematics is very interesting and I enjoyed it. My hope is that you continue with this kind of thinking and take control of your own destiny.

  2. Patrick on March 4, 2020 at 11:50 AM

    GL,
    This is a fascinating poem. I love the way that you can analysis your surroundings. I totally agree that you have the power to create your own destiny and I hope good fortune follows you. Thank you for sharing your poem with me and please keep writing these great poems! -Pat

  3. Homa on March 7, 2020 at 3:17 PM

    GL,

    Great poem! I enjoyed reading your poem and was happy to see that you’re taking charge of your own destiny. Your poem is abstract and is one that makes people think carefully about being in peace with the world and themselves. Keep writing and talking about what you love.

  4. Hannah on March 19, 2020 at 1:00 PM

    GL–
    I love the way you spoke about the universe and space and time, transforming your experiences from something painful like chaos into something powerful like a destiny that you are in control of. Thank you for your poem. I hope I get to read more of your writing in the future!
    Hannah

  5. Nick Rice on March 27, 2020 at 1:57 PM

    Great opening line! This hooks the reader in and the flow that each line has keeps them entertained. I like how you go through the personal struggles and how you show that it won’t make you stuck. This can help other people going through similar experiences know that there is a way out. That life is better when you can overcome adversity.

  6. Sarah on April 1, 2020 at 2:06 AM

    GL,

    The rhythm of this poem swept me away. From the first half where you are speaking very abstractly to the drastic “Riddle ME” which grabs the reader. I also thought that your ending line was a strong way to close this piece out. Keep protecting your important energy and keep writing!

    Much love.

  7. Lynette Tapia on April 2, 2020 at 3:42 AM

    This was a marvelous piece! Your writing in this poem truly left me with a lot to think about such as the concepts of manifestation and destiny. In particular the line, “I’ve made peace out chaos/ by taking a piece out of chaos” was a very interesting play on words that greatly contributed to the overall message of this poem. As a chemistry major in college, I especially appreciated the relation of mass and matter to energy. Quite literally, the laws of science state that energy cannot be created nor destroyed. This law perfectly fits with this poem because although one cannot control energy, one is able to control the way they react to it. This poem shows that this is possible by shaping your mindset and perception of life. This is prevalent when you stated, “So, I trained my mind to freeze the earth/ So I can take the MC out of square…” Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed your work as I found it to be honest, inspiring, and powerful. Great work!

  8. Sean on April 2, 2020 at 12:41 PM

    GL,
    Your poem is a really fascinating take on the ways that we distract ourselves from our realities. Sometimes it is important for all of us to escape this earth and this reality and move to a place that is a distraction from the way things are. I thought that your poem was a really good example of abstract thinking and writing. It also really well depicts how it is to feel stuck and not being able to move forward in the reality that we are living in. I thought also, like a lot of the other commenters, that your opening line was a really good hook into the rest of the poem and set up the ideas that you presented very well.

  9. Xenia de Luna on April 3, 2020 at 3:34 AM

    Wow! What a unique poem and way of thinking.
    In order to unravel the message behind your words, I really had to take a minute since you got me hooked.
    I have major respect for you having the strength and will to design and live the life you want to live, the least of us are as courageous and brave as you are. I’m inspired!

  10. Ian on April 8, 2020 at 12:32 PM

    GL this is a very powerful poem. You really have made a great work using very abstract and indirect imagery connecting big ideas together. I especially liked how you connected the idea of the challenges in your life as having made you stronger, and has even formed your character. Keep up the great work, I would like to read more poems in this stye.

  11. Fateema Farzana on April 12, 2020 at 11:21 PM

    “Adversity is the main verb, that’s protecting me.”- This is mind blowing! Love the confidence and energy you are spreading through this poem. Everyone has the ability to create their own path, to reach their destination. They just need the determination like you do in here.

  12. Hayley Punjabi on April 13, 2020 at 11:32 AM

    Hi GL,

    I really enjoyed this poem because as I was reading it, I visually pictured “negative energy” as a grey cloud dissipating. I think the way you wrote about “mass” and “matter” was important, because when you take away physical things, what’s left is energy that you can control. I was also fascinated by the line “my vision is what many pretend to see”. It makes me think about whether my own vision is clear enough to make possible, and what “negative energy” I can get rid of to make fulfill my vision. Thanks for the inspiring message.

  13. heysyd123 on April 14, 2020 at 2:31 PM

    Okay, that opening line was amazing and this was such a cool poem. It really made me think about how we can overcome the world and chaos and adversity. Very thought provoking. Keep writing!

  14. Molly Reed on April 16, 2020 at 5:31 PM

    GL, great poem! The balance between peace and destiny paralleled with your math and science metaphors is complex and eloquent. Chaos is powerful yet manageable and your poem showcases how hard you are working to take control of your destiny.You are incredibly intelligent and I am excited to see all the great things you do.

  15. Maranda Estwick on April 19, 2020 at 3:00 AM

    This poem is so good. It is on another level, so much that I don’t know where to start. I like the title, it kept me connected to the overall message of the poem because there was so much depth in each line, it was easy to get hung up on what each line meant. I like how the first part was about getting rid of what is upsetting or coming to your disturb your peace. It is very important that you first identify that. A lot of times when I’m trying to get back to my peace i’ll make the mistake of thinking it is me who is causing a disruption but you really have to look at a situation and isolate the factor that is upsetting you. You can’t let that one thing ruin your mental and emotional state because you need those to be strong in order to thrive.

  16. Logan Lehman on April 19, 2020 at 8:26 PM

    GL,

    The way that you describe the process of taking control of your own life is very beautiful. I especially liked the way that you brought physics into this poem. Two of my favorite lines were “Riddle ME. / I am, who I tend to be.” Something about them is just sticking in my head, and I think it was a great way to transition between ideas. Thank you for sharing this poem, and please keep writing!

  17. Tiona Lancaster on April 20, 2020 at 2:02 AM

    This piece was very interesting to read, and I love how you added your own flare to really make it your own. Protecting one’s energy is very important, so I say continue on the path you’re on, for it will surely lead to peace and enlightenment.

  18. Chelsey on April 22, 2020 at 9:14 PM

    Good work! my favorite part is “I am who I tend to be” it takes such a complex idea and simplifies it so beautifully. Also, by changing the length of each line, it makes the pace unique and would fit really well listening to it as a spoken word piece. Thank you so much for sharing your work. I hope you continue to make your own destiny.

  19. Emily on April 23, 2020 at 2:34 PM

    This is such a great poem; the opening really captivated me to keep reading. I also really liked the last line, “adversity is the main verb, that’s protecting me”. I think when we face adversity, we often don’t realize how it really makes us grow as a person, and I really love how you mentioned how it protects you

  20. Beth Ellinport on April 23, 2020 at 2:35 PM

    GL,

    My favorite line of your poem was “…My vision is what many pretend to be, I have the ability to create my own destiny…” These words are very inspiring and speak volumes of the person you are and to become. They have inspired me and will inspire everyone in your life. Thank you for sharing.

  21. Jordan Kilgallen on April 23, 2020 at 2:38 PM

    The words you have written jump off the page. It was eye opening to read and I can relate to the words and visions you create. The line, “for chaos is but an imbalance in the natural disorder,” is so true. Adversity is how we grow, and nothing worthwhile is grown without hard work. Thank you for sharing. I hope many more more the opportunity to read your writing.

  22. Jocelyn Matos on April 28, 2020 at 11:54 AM

    Your title has caught my attention, I truly believe that universe has a way of working things for you if you speak it into existence. Its very important to make sure you don’t let bad energy interfere with your vision. It takes a good mentality to not fold under pressure! We will all face chaos but it is how we deal with it that matters. It can build character. Pressure makes diamonds! Keep building!

  23. Catie on May 1, 2020 at 12:04 PM

    GL,
    This poem was incredibly well written. Your creative mind is very obvious in this. The way you incorporated math, science, and your destiny all in one was moving. I liked how you made this relatable in a way that we can understand each other without truly knowing what each other has gone through. Your final line was my favorite, and I don’t think you could have ended it any better. I hope that you continue to write about your destiny and help others to understand how to be at peace.

  24. Kellyn on September 29, 2020 at 8:26 PM

    I really enjoy the scientific metaphors you use here, and the line “Riddle ME” is very powerful. I love your message about being in control of your own destiny and I hope you will keep writing!

  25. JM on November 13, 2020 at 2:34 PM

    Dear GL,

    Thank you for sharing this poem– the first two lines really hooked me in because they were so clever. This poem is so full of wisdom but it’s also entertaining at the same time because of how cleverly you use metaphors of math and science to talk about carving out a peaceful space for yourself in the world. I also like the line, “I am, who I tend to be” — that struck me as a calm, laid back, and wise way to look at things, but at the same time it’s powerful because you’re essentially telling the reader “I am who I am.” Your personality and cleverness really shines through in this poem, and I also loved how well you made everything rhyme and flow. This poem inspired me to be confident and carve out spaces of peace for myself. I hope you continue to write and share more poems.

    Best,
    JM

  26. ken on December 17, 2020 at 9:50 AM

    You did such a good job writing this poem! You captured the audience with that opening line and did not let them go at all! It is truly and amazing poem! Explaining how you changed you negative energy to positive is truly amazing! Keep up the good work and never stop writing!!

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