If I Was a Perfect Man

By DB

 

If I was a perfect man

I would never fall but always stand
For the things I believe and the ones I don’t understand

If I was a perfect man
My manners would be different
Like yes, no, and excuse me ma’am

If I was a perfect man
I would drink out of a glass and not a can
And greet my peers by shaking hands

If I was a perfect man
I would never tell lies to gather fans
Or turn my back against my mans
Or do destructive things to increase or advance
If I was a perfect man

If I was a perfect man
I wouldn’t fly just to land
But soar across to prove that I can
Somewhat be a perfect man

8 Comments

  1. The Running Son on June 20, 2013 at 8:09 PM

    Great poem. Becoming better men is always possible.

  2. alicia on June 20, 2013 at 9:38 PM

    What an amazing poem. The line ‘I wouldn’t fly just to land’ was very deeply felt. Your ending clinched it. Keep writing…you have a powerful voice.

  3. Dory on June 22, 2013 at 12:24 AM

    If you were a perfect man, you wouldn’t be human. What you described is what makes us human. For all your good or bad habits, whichever, don’t strive for perfection. Strive to be your best YOU. Great writing!

  4. solansomechukz on June 22, 2013 at 11:56 AM

    Love this <3

    • freemindsbookclub on July 8, 2013 at 3:48 PM

      Thank you for stopping by and commenting! It means a lot to our Free Minds members in prison to know their poetry is being read and making an impact. We hope you’ll keep stopping by to give feedback – it definitely makes a difference.

  5. Mbachur Mbenga on July 2, 2013 at 12:33 PM

    Hey DB,
    This is great!
    Keep the saying “nobody is perfect” in mind. You want to grow to be of excellence,and that takes time. Learning from your mistakes and dropping bad habits is the first step.
    I know you will grow into excellence.

    -MM

  6. Lila Weitzner on July 2, 2013 at 12:52 PM

    DB,
    I love that you end with “somewhat be a perfect man” because it reminds us all that nobody is perfect and we can only strive to be the best possible version of ourselves. Your writing is beautiful. I have read this poem before, but it still hits me how powerful what you are saying is. Thank-you!

  7. Andre Williams on July 2, 2013 at 3:52 PM

    DB, I enjoyed your poem on how you have acknowledged that you are not perfect and need to make changes to improve yourself. Always keep in mind that no one is perfect. Continue to strive to be perfect though.

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