Growth
By SU
My vision was obscured from
the blood in my eyes.
So, I used that to write my notes
down in red, I transcribed…
Yet I’m alive, heart almost numb,
seeking an escape route from this
oppression and feelings of opprobrium…
For he or she who has no reform is lost,
being acumen has no real cost.
Striving, living, possibly
and hopefully forgiven…
I stood alone, lonely,
the phonies had so much acrimony…
That alone made me strong
knowing that obligation was to
the most high…growth.
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You are strong and your words speak volumes. Thank you.
You wrote such a powerful poem and I hope you continue to stand strong and can see clearly now. I especially liked the line, “For he or she who has no reform is lost, being acumen has no real cost.”
Well to read your poetry I’ll need to keep a thesaurus on hand. But I can’t find any fault with your poetry.
Hi, SU,
Your talent as a writer is incredible. Your diction is so beautiful, and so decadently loaded with so many words that I didn’t know and I had to look up. Your metaphors are so captivating – just in the first few lines you already have the reader roped in and intrigued. Thank you not only for expanding my vocabulary but also for sharing this message… this message of self improvement and growth in spite of injustice and incredible adversity. Your words mean a lot.
This poem was very well written! The topic is a good one to write about, talking about growth and strength is such a powerful topic. Keep up the good work!!
Wow, this is a great piece. I hope you find peace in your writing, I like your phrasing with acumen, so well written. Keep up the great writing.
SU,
You line that reads ‘For he or she who has no reform is lost” leaves such a powerful impact on me. I truly appreciate what you have put forth in this piece. Not only am I inspired to continue my process of constant growth, but I am also reinvigorated by the picture you paint. I quote from one of my favorite shows relates weel to what I got out of your work: “At our lowest points, we are the most open to change.”
As for your writing, I really appreciate your word choice and flow. Thank you for putting forth this part of yourself.
I am sorry you had to experience that kind of loneliness. However, I am inspired by growth that your have been able to achieve and value. Keep on growing!
SU, the first four lines of your poem- love it! There are two points you make that really stand out to me: 1. Those who do not change never find their true selves. 2. Those around you who are bitter will truly show you how cruel people can be, and oddly that negative energy can help boost you to want to become even better while they’re still bitter. Growth.
SU,
I love the metaphoric descriptiveness you use to create your message, the way you word this poem had me actually seeing everything you wrote. This poem was very sad though and represented someone who felt alone and lost, like they want redemption from all they’ve been through and done. I appreciate this kind of unique message and unique word choices. The beginning though is my favorite part about the blood and red… it really hooks the reader. I wish you the best.
SU, the imagery you create, and the power behind those images, is really powerful. I also enjoyed the way you played with the meter and rhyme scheme of the poem throughout it, but still made sure it was tight and had a nice flow form beginning to end. Great work!
SU,
Hi, I’m Edmon and I’m in a class that aims to engage with the community beyond the university and corporations. Wow, I really liked this poem. I felt like I was visualizing it right there. My one question would be how did the blood get on your eyes. What reading this deeper made me wonder what made you this sad. Good luck and good job!
SU,
The flow and rhyming in your poem is wonderful. There was a lot of vulnerability and emotion in your poem and I want to thank you for sharing. I hope you keep pushing through all the hardships, and remain strong. Your writing is a great expression of who you are, keep it up.